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KnittingKneedle 2008-01-27 ch 1,	abuseHi I’m with the review marathon First off, you do write very well- you pay attention to the other senses when describing not just sight which I always appreciate. The descriptions you use are very vivid…but they’ve been done about a million times before. You’ve managed to describe a typical haunted house, skillfully, yes- but there is very little originality about the house itself. I liked the tension you’ve managed to describe and your spelling and grammar is great…a tiny little pedantic comment is that ‘Candles adorned each of the pathways on either sides of the walls’ should be just ‘either side’ but that is really nitpicking! I’m not a massive fan of vampire stories, the format is tired and the story is old…but the weaving between dreams intrigued me….good job!
Crying-Without-Tears 2008-01-07 ch 1,	abusethis is cool
tabiscus 2007-07-29 ch 1,	abuseI liked that you were very descriptive, and thought you portrayed her feelings and the scene very well. You captured the feeling, something that not many people can do, and made the reader feel it as well. My only complaint, and I beleive that this might just be me, is that you didn't explain more in the beginning; and I don't mean some long explanation or anything, but just that some of the things you mentioned were later on and a bit of surprise. Anyways, overall I loved and, seriously, found myself disappointed that you hadn't continued on with it. Best of luck in the fortune, if you decide to continue on with this idea or such!
CK Shorty 2007-05-06 ch 1,	abuseThis was amazing.
Indravyn 2007-03-28 ch 1, anon.	abuseI found story beautifully poetic and delightfully detailed perfectly. Too bad there is not more to this for I would like to see it pursued. Beautiful.
Gold from the Stars 2007-01-31 ch 1,	abuseThat was so beautiful, so artistic! I am sincerely looking forward to reading more of your work.
ADSpencer 2006-10-26 ch 1,	abuseWow! I love this story. I think I might add it to my c2. You've got a great talent for writing, especially description! Nice job!
Gilded Coins 2006-10-21 ch 1,	abuseWow, what can I really say? I agree with the previous reviews—you write wonderful descriptions and have a good vocabulary. The whole story was well-paced, vivid, and poetic yet clear. You were able to write something passionate and pretty-sounding without it coming off as boring, confusing, or pretentious. The only things I didn't like were purely personal. I'm not much into romance/love scenes. I did like this character's fall into darkness. It was a nice portrayal of how alluring evil can be. It's also sad without being sad, if I've explained myself well. The happenings were sad but you didn't exploit the angst—that's what I mean.
Scarlet Dragoness 2006-10-21 ch 1,	abuseSo you love description huh? I'm a sucker for detail and vision! You are great! I love your stories and when are you going to update night predators?! I'M UPSET WITH YOU REI!! lol! Just kidding Sonata
Celtsea 2006-10-19 ch 1,	abuseFlowed brilliantly, fantastic despcription, and encouraged me to read your other works.
Royal Bliss 2006-10-19 ch 1,	abuseVery nice description in this. I could pretty much picture it all, the way you put it. Nice job. Anyway, you could've probably broken up some of the sentences into shorter ones. ... Or you could've used more semi-colons. This wasn't bad at all though you should be proud :P
Tatiana Moore 2006-10-09 ch 1,	abuseWow. The flow of your writing and your description of her surroundings are very VERY good. I'm a little green with jealousy because I don't think I can get the description down quite like you. Great job... you can really set the scene. Looking forward to reading some of your other stuff!
BangBangYourDead 2006-09-26 ch 1,	abuseWow, you write really well. I really like your style. Thanks for the feedback. =] ♥BangBang
Adakua 2006-09-14 ch 1,	abuseI think I know from somewhere...or maybe I just read some of your work. Sorry if you were confused of my story, I meant to show the my full story began at chapter...or you were confused about the whole thing I understand. I'm not the type of person who expains things well in stories. Wow, I just work alot of sentences about me...lol. Ok, I see that you like detailed chapters. Hey so do I! But I just realized that too much details can confuse readers. I ahve done it alot. I really could care less about grammar right now. Maybe on the third paragraph, you could I don't know seperate it into two. Also this is a gothic mood right, I like gothic--or dark anyway. lol I just realized your pename--darkgoddess89, what's the 89 for? Alight nuff reviewing, gotta finish homework. Till next time adaku-chan
Blehk 2006-09-10 ch 1,	abuseExcellent imagery. =) For me, it was reminscient of the Anne Rice books, so I really enjoyed it, especially the order of the story.

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