One of the best stories i have read to date, [and thats saying a lot] i have noticed a few spelling mistakes but that doesn't mean it's a bad story.
At first i thought that i was a bit too Harry Pottery but after a while that started to wear off and the full impact of the story hit me. [Although the naked Daniel Radcliff was kind of a weird HP refrence]
I have only managed to read up to chapter 35 so i do not know which way the story will go, alhough i does seem to be going in a nice direction already.
This being the first story i have read on Fictionpress has shown me the potenial that this website hold. [And your potential]
I woud give this story 9/10 for all that i have read so far. [Minus 1 point because of a naked guy *shivers*]

Oh yeah, that's what it was. Cell phone is two words, honey. ^^

Hey. ^^ Just stumbled upon this story when I was bored, and I would just like to comment on a few things so far.

1. It's well-written. There aren't many mistakes, although sometimes the dialogue punctuation is confusing or not correct. There are also a few spelling mistakes. (You have a beta, correct?)

2. The characters are, how to say it, not memorable. None of them become realistic and tangible. There are so many of them that you fail to really indulge and explore one person's character thoroughly enough so that person actually has some resounding sentimental value. You also have so many characters... gack, the names get confusing. If there was some kind of stimulus to remember each of them, it might be easier.

3. The conflicts in this story, or at least the ones presented, are too frivolous. There is no driving momentum pushing each chapter, no addiction of the reader who desperately needs an answer or resolution to a dilemma or mystery. Even though the inciting incident had already passed, there is no one unifying conflict that may entail others.

4. The universe is too contained and restrained. There are so many unanswered questions, such as the purpose and reason about being at that school. What are they going to do when they graduate? Be used by the government? Does the rest of the world know about this? Even Harry Potter and Avatar had universal conflicts that drove the plot forward. Each has an infinite, expandable universe that overcomes the barrier of any single building (the school building) but allows fan fiction to be written about it.

5. The appearances of the characters seem somewhat... two-dimensional. You describe some of the characters, such as the typical "stalker dude" and antagonist "evil, biatchy girl" but fail to give the reader a description of any of the other characters. Consistency with this is just one of my Pet Peeves, so it's not a major issue, but eh...

Occasionally, this story delves deeper than it usually does, such as the case with the natatorium or the ice wall. It's those moments of creativity and mystery that I wish this entire story encompassed, while I personally prefer a less emphasis on the typical teenage dating. (The love circles have all been written before, and a lot better at that. What makes this story with what it has to offer?) Or, even better, weave and connect those two seemingly separate worlds into something cohesive, consistent and special. Perhaps my greatest praise is your ability to actually finish and re-edit such an epically long creation. Something I doubt I could do, lol. Hope to hear a reply from you soon. ;)

*chin quivers* You fullfilled your promise to write another chapter, but I didn't expect this raw, deep, wild sadness.

im pretty tired, so im goin to bed, but just make sure when u put it on paper to remove all the random spaces to save trees! :]

Hello!

I just finished reading this story that I found while browsing. I love this story. Reading this last author note, I must tell you, your plot is MUCH better than the original one. Also, I don't really think it's that bad choppiness, wise. There was some confusion and A LOT of left out or misused words. But I'm sure you can catch them in your "Great Edit."

Ironically and unbeknownst to me, I was reading the Princess of Thieves the other day. And w/ no knowledge that days later I would be reading another one of your stories!

As for a sequel, I would love to see one, but there is so much resolution in your ending that I don't know if you could resurrect a story of the same quality w/o a lot of hardship. But from what you say this sounds INSANELY long. I read it all in one sitting, and now it's 1:20 in the morning. Ah well, what happens when you get caught up in a good book?

Hi Lizzy. All in all: EooD Rocked. It is sad to think that I won't be breatless in anticipation for the next EooD chapter. I really enjoyed the story overall but there is a few things that puzzled me. For instance I don't understand why Gary decided to stay behind in the end. May it is an inside thing that you and your friends will understand? Another thing is the sudden revelation that Jen is the daughter of a really evil mage.

As for a sequel -- it would be a really great idea. I will check in occasionally to see how you progress.

I am currently suffering from a slight case of writer's block (or lack of motivation) to continue with Elemental Power -- The Quest. My sister is nagging me to continue writing as she really liked what I was doing, but I just haven't felt like writing lately.

I wish you all the best for any future projects that you might decide to undertake.

Missing EooD already.
Jaco (aka Garion)

omg! sequel plz! im dying to know why gary couldnt take the portal home. im also dying to know of sakura comes back more powerful and ohh a bigger role for the mages. maybe like evil mages vs lizzy and friends.

I want to know what Dark Magic is behind the trapdoor! Very exciting! I have to go now though, will come back to this asap!

This was really good. The duels were exciting, and I never knew what was going to happen next. So your 'surprises' certainly worked! Justin's arrow being split reminded me of the Disney Robin Hood film, hehe, but I liked the take you had on it; that only Elvish arrows could split others. Poor Justin, and Kik too, having her secret found out. I hope they don't stay fallen out for too long.

Great chapter!

The duels were so fun! I like her use of water in the grass to beat Taylor. In fact, whenever she's using water, it gets fun!

Off to see whose name the bubbgle whispered!

I'm sorry I've neglected this for so long!! I've had exams and stuff and not much time for much else since!

Their reactions to the play were funny. Jen's so over-dramatic, lol!

I salute you

Yay!! it is done. good job. goh! making me wait nearly a week and a half for the final chapter! psh. i like the ending, even though it is really cheezy. (which isn't nessesarilly a bad thing!) are you gunna make this into a movie like reversio? wait a minute, if they are the guardiens of paridy, and they guard balence, was there a guard for the fuin? sorry for the random question
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