Forget what the other dude said, you know I love your stuff. I wish I could still write poetry! You make me miss it...

This isn’t bad, but I feel like it lacks structure. First, I suggest you separate this into stanzas rather than leaving it as one long stream of lines. Second, I suggest you work on the rhythm. This piece just doesn’t flow well, and the effect is jarring on the reader. I had to stop and reread the poem to be able to follow your train of thought, and that’s never a good thing. Perhaps counting your syllables per line and using a repeating pattern could help you with the rhythm. Once more, there is nothing wrong with this poem; I just feel that you have room for improvement. Keep up the good work!