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| alice is dying 2006-09-04 ch 1,  | abuseI love some of the adjectives you use in this piece. It creates such a vivid image, that even as I'm writing this review it hasn't completely faded. I found one or two gammatical/spelling errors in this piece, which I won't discuss directly. Instead, just please be sure to reread your work. Little mistakes like these make the poem seem rough, and the poet seem immature. Which I'm sure you are not. Overall, this was a very interesting piece. I'm looking forward to seeing more from you. ♥ Alice |
| champagnechapstick 2006-09-04 ch 1, | abuseI KILLED YOUR SOULnaa, this is a very good-poem-because you are a very good-poet. Keep up the work. Joshx3 |
| hateandkill-D 2006-09-04 ch 1, | abuseCOOL! |