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| Vinnie 2006-09-06 ch 1, anon. | abuseWell. Religious paralells with the last days of Christ, really, really nasty desriptions of er, penetration... I like it, I really did, but Goddamn! I've never winced at poetry before. I did love the way you portrayed 'Jesus' as a child with no real parents, just a nanny, and the relationship with 'Judas', the silver bowl was a lovely toutch. Although I have Crow-like daydreams of bloody, violent revenge. XD |
| Alexa Bleach 2006-09-04 ch 1,  | abuseI loved this! It was poignent and moving... and I loved the whole tie of the old-world crucifiction to the new age of churches and warehouses. The whole 'being led to death by the guy who was flirting with you' thing was disturbing, and so well written. I also liked the non-use of quotations... it made it more memorable, likening it to someone's memory. I'm definetly favoriting this one. Great job, wonderful short, and I hope to look forward to more like this one. ^_^ |