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notwithoutyou 2008-09-25 ch 1,	abuseaw no! poor girl. I know you probably hate this... but do you think you could make a follow up? I'm such a sucker for happy endings and I'd like to think these two got together. And she isn't off living unhappily ever after. Wonderfully written though :)
strawberrie0 2008-05-23 ch 1,	abuseWow. That was a home run straight to the heart. Love love love.
BluePillow75 2008-03-20 ch 1,	abuseNo! You mean piece of **! Why oh why did it have to have a sad ending? Though, it´s still a good story and so on, but i wanted it to have a happy ending...
teenqueen21 2008-03-19 ch 1,	abuseYou're really good at this! This story was almost perfect, except for the parts where loud noises kept poping up to drown out the names... that was distracting.
P 2008-03-17 ch 1, anon.	abuseAw. Ayos. :)
NoieD 2008-01-16 ch 1,	abuseI definitely enjoy your writing, but could we please get a happier ending? They don't have to be soul mates but I'm really intrigued by these nameless characters and would love to follow them to the next stage of their lives.
hitomi-kun 2007-09-20 ch 1,	abuseOH MY GOD... Floored would be a hgihgly inappropriate word when it comes to reading the end part... but to be blunt here, I already had a good idea about the 'liking somone' part... heehee... but i like how everything went... it's sad..but in a good way.. heck..i dont like it... "like" doesnt even come close, as you say... nice one... i was surprised when the word 'filipino' popped up, though..lol im a filipino/a, in my case...so...HI :-)
JamieBell 2007-05-22 ch 1,	abuseAbsolutely tragic. I loved it! Thanks for sharing.
cherrystraw 2007-05-08 ch 1,	abusereally good! be nice if you would make a sequel
Lady E 2007-03-18 ch 1,	abuseThat was quite a one-shot. Tight, moving, what every short story aspires to be. "The dire is always immaculate and magnanimous to the lady." - I am not sure I understand this sentence, no matter which way I turn my head to look at it. But so many of your sentences mean much more than they appear on the surface, and maybe I am stuck in the box here. "It is a backup statement he had prepared a while ago, just in case something like this would happen, and it works." - Haha. He treats it like a game, a contest, which to him I guess it is. It reminds me of kindergarten love with the little boy constantly teasing the poor little girl. "'Being depressed and stuff doesn’t really make the situation any better, now does it?' He lies easily, because he would rather have her see his optimistic side rather than his cynical one." - Seriously. My favorite line. Maybe I'm just a superficial reader, but I think the reader hasn't really gotten to know him, our main character, that well. We really only see his skin-deep personality, the way he carelessly mixes up "Chinese" and "Filipino," the way he treats everything as a joke, the way he's a little dissatisfied with his life and his group of friends. But we don't really get to know much more. And this sentence, "he would rather have her see his optimistic side rather than his cynical one," blatantly tells us there is a whole lot more to know, that we've been fooled for the entire story, and this guy, this character, we've trusted is not all he seems. Mysterious and absolutely tantalizing. And the way their names get drowned out by background ambience heightens the sense of disconnectedness. We know them, peeking into their lives through the window you've opened up, and yet we can't really know who they are. He knows her too, having spent a few weeks pulling her strings, and yet he doesn't really know her either, not enough. Most of all, associating honesty with the cliched act of blushing was almost unique and very intriguing. It is impressive that you've turned it into something more than its usual banal appearance on this site. Favorites, I think.
Jessica S1 2007-02-14 ch 1,	abuseI stumbled upon this piece accidently, and I am so glad I decided to take a look, because it really is a lovely piece. I can really feel the sense of loss here, the sense of teen awkwardness, and those happy moments. Great job.
BrokenHeartedAngel 2007-02-01 ch 1,	abusewhow... i mean... whow.. thisis-i-oh my-holy- IM BUYING YOU A PIZZA THIS IS SO FREEKING GOOD IT CAN NOT BE PUT INTO WORDS! THIS IS SO IMPOSIBLY GOOD IT MAKES MY FACE HURT! I WANT TO SEND THIS TO EVERY ONE I KNOW! SERIOUSLY! ITS THAT GOOD!11
Fairytale Gurl 2007-01-02 ch 1,	abusegd story! i like:) but um...just one little thing you mentioned that the teacher was hinting at 'harvard' and 'penn state'. i think you meant the teacher was hinting at 'harvard'; and 'upenn'. b/c upenn is like harvard an ivy league and one of the best in the country. but penn state is a crappy state school so it doesn't make sense for the teacher to mention harvard AND penn state together. but otherwise i really like your story!
EnigmaticArsenic 2006-12-24 ch 1,	abuseare you serious- a d to a b? man, i wish i had it that easy in high school. to think i could've slacked off the entire semester and... oh, wait... i think i did that anyway. but moving on... wow. so i wasn't quite sure whether i liked this story or not. don't get me wrong- it's written very well with solid dialogue and character interaction- but through much of the first part they just felt... stereotyped. but this ending definitely cinches it with that twist. very very nice. (by the way- what was the deal with not giving them names? not complaining or anything- i thought it was an amusing touch- but i'm curious if there's something deeper behind it. maybe to just echo the lost chance?) but anyway- sorry about all this banter i was browsing through the site and noticed your name, and... it seems vaguely familiar, so i thought i would take a peek, and i'm sorry if i've offended you with all this mindlessness. really truly. but i still don't know why i recognize it. -_-' ...however, i do suddenly want to retake writing my own neglected 'guy tutors girl leading to hs romance' story again. sigh. i'm going to get killed for it though... well, best of luck. thanks for the read.
whacked 2006-10-29 ch 1,	abuseMust you always have such sad endings? aw..i feel so bad for him...and i want him to fly to Virginia to scope her out! Ah well, it was a very well written piece and since i have been looking for something good to read since morning I was so happy to have found this. (I'm still going to go on hoping that they'll meet at some point)...yeah the end did tie in everything about why she was being so...ahem distant/indifferent. And aww i love how you went about this, so completely different from the rest of those stories about jock (i'm generalising because there was never any indication that this is it what he was) and plain janes. I like the whole idea of wearing her emotion on her sleeves was what got him liking her. Have to ask though, because i didn't really understand (and now i question how you'll answer this) but what was the significance of not giving away their names?

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