love the imagery innit. x

oh my gosh...wonderful and very sad...i'm sorry about your classmate though...but i enjoyed reading this poem!

adding to my c2!

a few of my friends/classmates died this summer, too. car accidents. front page in the newspaper.

lovely flow. it seemed to rhyme (even if it didn't exactly) but every line had a ring to it. this is wonderful.

:)

Wow loved it. And *yay* I didn't need the explanation *props for me*. I love it - I absolutely love it. Everything. Esp. the second to last stanza. Beautifully tragic. Onto my favs it goeth.

You should check out some of my poems -"Mona Lisa" and "Four Letter Words"Thanks.

Wow. I'm sorry your classmate...Man, that's messed up, to be hit by a fire truck.

I like the first two lines. And the sort of haphazard rhyme that runs through the poem. I think the last two lines don't fit in stylistically with the rest, but on their own, they're pretty good. This was a nice poem. Keep writing.