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| Casey.Duh 2008-02-16 ch 2,  | abuseI loveth Geoff. End of story. That is where it should end. The beginning should just be: "Geoff is amazing" The end. I would totally love it! The rest of the story was good but he is pretty much the highlight of my day. |
| weepingsilver 2006-10-21 ch 1, | abuseAh! *jumps and spinns and clapps and does anything else that show that im excited to have you back!* Im so glade you dicided to write again i thought I was gonna die if you didnt! you just that good of a writer and i hate you fore that :) jk! i love this, its just amazing! well of to read the next chappter! |
| GinnyYvette 2006-10-05 ch 2, | abuseOOh I really like this story! Lucas is adorable. I can't wait till you update again! Kat |
| BlyssfulStorm 2006-09-20 ch 2, | abuseCute. |
| Anti Rainbows 2006-09-06 ch 1, | abuse*Shock* Gasp! You do exist, You do exist!! I had to double check my inbox when I saw the name, I was like... nahh... when the last time I saw an alert from THAT name. Anyways, I like the story. Makes me think back to when I was in 10th grade and two of our teachers started to play out the balcony scene in class XD!! Keep updating? |
| Account no longer used. 2006-09-06 ch 2, | abuseGreat chappie!:) |
| Inherent 2006-09-06 ch 2, | abuseI love this story so far. I read the summary in my author's alerts and it sounded so interesting. Anywho I really can't wait to see how the story goes. |
| ashmael 2006-09-05 ch 2, | abuseSo, I'm ensnared now. Lucas is so sweet - he makes a great main character, imo. Can't wait to see what happens at their next practice. ^.~ More soon, please?Thank you! |
| ashmael 2006-09-05 ch 1, | abuseInteresting start! I'm liking the characters quite a bit~ off to the next chapter! |
| la-vita-bella 2006-09-05 ch 2, | abuseI actually really like this. It's not overly descriptive, very colloquial, and it has a fairly good plot. It's also very realistic in terms of dialogue and actions, which is something that I'm very picky about. Oh and there are some very great lines you add in. "Verbal diarrhea." That's great. Haha. You add in little ways to describe things that are excellent. The only thing that I'm wary about is there are a few cliches in this. First chapter there were a few overused phrases. The whole "little girl" thing is very overdone. You're creative, so I would've liked to see a different way to describe Luke's blushing, or whatever he was doing at the time. Second, there are times when Luke's character annoys me. Some points, I absolutely love him, like with the babbling, for instance, or the bathroom scene. Other times, however, like his whining annoy me. I mean, he's your character, but honestly, how often do you hear 17-year-old (he's 17, right?) boys whine? I just found that a bit unrealistic. But other than these, I really am pleased with this story. I like it! Haha. I can't wait to see what happens! Adios. |
| Account no longer used. 2006-09-05 ch 1, | abuseI like this already. Very, very nice start. Please update soon^^ |
| Shadow 3013 2006-09-04 ch 1, | abuseCute start to the story! I'm pleased to see that you're writing again, and I'll be looking forward to your next update. |
| emotional hangover 2006-09-04 ch 1, | abuseThis story is already adorable. I can't wait for an update. |