Such a sad story. These people were just trying to live, and they get attacked. It makes the reader hate the heroes of New Elements. They have seemed to become blood thirsty killers. A radical change from the past story.

Once again, the story works. The plot makes the reader want backstory on these people, to learn why they are being attacked. The grammer usage is good, it might need some work in a few places. Other then those, it is an enjoyable read.

It is very short, and makes the reader craving more. Continue with your work, your doing an awesome job!