 fatbird33 2008-10-09 . chapter 1i liked the style of this poem, with the italics. nice touch. |
 saccharine asphyxiation 2007-08-25 . chapter 1Very nice. I like the repetition. You very aptly captured an atmosphere with this piece. |
 Ammom 2007-08-15 . chapter 1It's short, but I do like it, especially the last line. |
 Travis C. Eckert 2006-12-16 . chapter 1Well this would suck if it happened. But a nice poem. |
 Arafax 2006-11-25 . chapter 1Nice...interesting... |
 Noihseret 2006-10-24 . chapter 1short and sweet! usually I do not like that but you used the effect perfectly and it worked well with the idea. speaking of which, I like the idea of 'lethargy' stopping you from 'running away again'. I am not sure if you meant this piece to be a medaphor for some something deeper, but I certainly feel something more than what's on the page.
keep up the great work! I am really enjoying this ^^ |
 sarah1491 2006-10-02 . chapter 1Ooh, nice. I really like how you formatted it. Like how you made the first four lines normal, next four italicized, next four normal, and the last for italicized again. Nice job. Keep writing! You're a great poet! :)
- sarah (sarah1491) |
 Angelic Hellraiser 2006-09-06 . chapter 1I like that! |
 Guardrail 2006-09-05 . chapter 1This was really good, I liked it a lot. Great work and definatley keep writing. |