I cant read this poem without thinking of gilmore girls because of the name, which doesnt make sense because the poem doesnt describe her at all... anyhow i like this... beautiful and not as abstract as alot of your work... great wrte

I like the way you've formatted the poem - there's rhyming here and there, and it's almost like you never know which words are going to rhyme, because they're all over. And the rhyming works. It doesn't detract from the poem, it adds to it. That's nice to see. Keep writing! :)

Nice and unique word choice. Rhyme is well done and nicely subtle.

Okay, so I don't know if I'm just translating this into what I think it is or if it really is meant to be about Lorelai Gilmore. I don't know, just figured that with a name so rare it was possibly about her. Regardless of the subject, I truly enjoyed the imagery and concise word choice.