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| doctor's diagnosis 2008-03-08 ch 1,  | abuseI personally think that it would be better if the last few lines were "She was all/Quiet eyes/And truthful lies/But that's all she was." It would go along more with the contradictions in the rest of the lines. I also think punctuation would be helpful. |
| Tragically Charismatic 2008-02-16 ch 1, | abuseSimply beautiful. |
| Scribe Of All Trades 2008-02-04 ch 1, | abuseI love the simple rhyme scheme in this. Again, another poem that reminds me of someone I knew. |
| caralita 2007-03-07 ch 1, | abusethis is a strong piece but it feels unfinished... |
| cocaine and cherries 2006-10-26 ch 1, | abuse'ecstasy and edge'. powerful line. |
| riotmaker 2006-10-19 ch 1, | abusei absolutely loved this. every single word of it was amazing and gorgeous. xoxo ps. added to faves. |
| Penguins and Popsicles 2006-09-06 ch 1, | abuseWow. This one blew me away. I love it. That's about all I can say. It's perfect. |
| hey maria 2006-09-05 ch 1, | abuseNot bad. I think the ending is a bit of a let-down, but on the whole it's okay. |