You asked politely for me to review this, and now that I have done so I am very much grateful! I'm not really into poetry but this poem is absolutely great! I love the imagery it portrayes, the story it tells.

Cool! I love this! Great job! The flow is wonderful and I just love every bit of it! Well done. Keep it up.

Wow! That was really *faints at the awesomeness of it all*

*gets back up and brushes self off* Cool! That was really cool! It's the kind of poem that you play scary music to.