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| dreamforever101 2006-09-05 ch 1,  | abuseThat was a really nice poem... THe word were good, the expression were rich the only thing is that we were clouds in the sky, so how can we cry tears made of cold stone?? Its sounds nice but maybe look for another material that's more cloud like, wispy and floating in the air. maybe.. Tears made of vapour? ( well maybe something else :D ) My Favorite part: "Drifting among the sky, gently stroking the stars" Identifies with my lazy feeling right now. LoL Great Work! Keep it up!! plz review back :) -Dreamforever101 |