|Reviews for What I deserve|
| Alena D'Etoiles 11/28/06 . chapter 1
That last line should be "Are what I deserve." Other than that, I liked it. The words were a little bland, but the message is clear. Good work.
| VestriDementisFemina 10/18/06 . chapter 1
I like this one. I'd change the line 'I've hurt people mentally', though. This is a very abstract, emotional poem, and 'mentally' is sort of clunky and technical. It draws away from the rest of the poem. Good work!
| moonsliver86 9/6/06 . chapter 1
not bad but i feel that the poem only manages to lightly graze my emotions; it could still be improved; but overall, good job