interesting, i kinda like it though, always fun to see some real vocabulary in a poem, i dig it, good job

i love the ending. the idea of descent is so clear in this poem. i love the entire last stanza. gorgeous.

-aly

i really like this piece, its so accusing and angry yet pityful in a way. you captured the sense of emotions perfectly.

keep it up man xD

i think this is pretty well written. . . i dont think i enjoy your mistakes. i dont enjoy most peoples mistakes...