Ahh I love this story too much. It's really fun. Everything was adorable.

I must say though, you've got no need to be so self conscious and negative about your writing!! It's great! So shut up and like it! Grr.

Hahahaha aahh wow I love that you "researched" by direct Play Doh experimentation. I can relate.

This story is wonderful.

You and your chapter are adorable, not pathetic. Silly you, get out from under that desk (like months ago, ohh well).

Your chapter names are perversely clever. I love them. I love them a lot.

Funny story.

About the "Is it okay if I kiss you" thing.

In sixth grade, I was at a movie with a friend and my boyfriend (as much of a boyfriend as one can have in sixth grade), and my friend had told my boyfriend that I wanted him to kiss me. So at some point during this movie, as I sit between my friend and boyfriend, he goes all, "I have something to ask you. (insert very awkward pause here, followed by a "yeah?" from me.) Could I kiss you?"

I'm ending the story there.

I look back on it and laugh to myself, every time. Always.

I didn't think I'd become addicted to reading stories so quickly. Ben was sort of out of character toward the ending, but what the hell do I care? It was a damn happy-ass ending, I can tell you that much. :p

love this!

Awesome!! :D

MUAHAHAHAHA I LOVED IT! it was funny and clever, btw i love the way u start all the chapters lol, its cute and funny and sexy. Glad shane got a happy ending too! Shane had to be my fav char btw! Such a good story

That chapter was not pitiful - Ashley makes a very good neurotic girl in a trench coat! I needed to review this chapter just to say it - you and your writing do not suck!

That was awesome. Thank you so much for writing this. It was really fun to read. :)

OH my god, AT LAST!
Haha!

Dont know how I came across u ( cos am all in and not this site), but I sure am glad :)

Woohoo! They kissed! There's angst! There's humour! Oh this is just puurect :D :D

~off to read off to read. Lalala~

PS, sorry am so hyper. Blame the rebull and this awesome chapter ;p

Pop is soda around here too

Hmm, yes... I just realised I've already read this before, so I'm not going to. I'm on the hunt for really good slashes, sorry. I had a feeling I'd read the story before but I kept thinking it was BUBBLES by someone whose pen name I can't quite remember, good story. See, most of the chapters of BUBBLES begin with innuendo as yours do. So sorry for my mistake.

Hmm, yes it's like Dr. Pepper 14's Saturday Morning Cartoons. I had to go read that just so I could ocmpare. The only similarities are the characters (i.e. Cody's gay and in love with blah - they have this weird friendship that's jokingly sexual) and the weird family/friends. The twins are cool.
Your writing style is by far better (Dr Pepper 14's is good but your's is better) and there are a lot of differences for example, there's more school and less home, at least so far.
I hope it gets better.