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| Joseph Mises 2006-12-02 ch 2,  | abuseOkay, I've read this chapter, and reread the prologue, and the whole thing all over again. It's a fantastic idea, simply fantastic. I have one suggestion that I think will only enhance the sequence. Im me later. |
| Joseph Mises 2006-12-02 ch 1, | abuseThis is quite impressive Stephanie, kind of a cross blend of Brave New World and the aftermath of Armageddon...Excellent idea! I love it...keep working on this, I can see this going far...What's your screename again, we'll talk about the story later on... |
| Shdwphoenix 2006-09-08 ch 1, | abuseI really like how this is starting out. Since the story is told from a first-person PoV, your first sentence already characterized Amelia for me. Despite having suffered through the apocalyptic tragedy brought on by who knows what from who knows where for who knows what reason ( XD ), she's very calm, almost matter-of-fact about it all. For some reason, I find that quite amusing. You only have one chapter out, so I won't go as far as to say that she feels defeated, but I definitely like her personality. Looking forward to reading more. Please continue writing! ^ ^ -Shdwphoenix |
| M. L. Mason 2006-09-08 ch 1, | abuseCool, i enjoyed this and it was pretty smooth and only a few hicups. I know the problem with getting reviews is that some people dont read it all and you eventually get shoved to the bottom. Could you do me a favour and review Black Battalion? I would like to see the next part of this story. :) 8/10 |