|Reviews for Treading Dust Like Water|
| R. Louise 2/1/07 . chapter 1
Completely amazing... and much more.
| none of burt's beeswax 12/5/06 . chapter 1
god, your imagery is amazing. the first stanza just draws the reader in. pure beauty.
| D. Rochelle 10/26/06 . chapter 1
Living origami. I hope not - I have a hard time with the inanimate kind. :)
I like this poem a lot. It seems sort of blurry and hazy, kind of with a sparkly overcoating. The only thing I can constructively crit is the second stanza. The "her fall" is a nice touch at the end, but it drives me crazy to have the fifth line for those two words. It would be 4/4/3/3/1 without it. I dunno, don't listen to me too much, I'm just a structure junkie.
Good poem, please keep writing. :)
| simpleplan13 10/17/06 . chapter 1
I really love that last line... beautifully done
| fairytale failure 9/18/06 . chapter 1
One of your sharpest images. And isn't there something about her that is still beautiful? anyway, the last group of three lines had the most impact, or so I thought. I also liked Behind kohl dirtied eyes she merges into mundane. because makeup is supposed to make you pretty...so its powerful.
| You Make Me Smile A Lot 9/11/06 . chapter 1
that was great (better than mine) thanx for reviewing my peom_
| AchtungBabyAchtung 9/9/06 . chapter 1
i love the shorter lines, and the broken bits. plus i like the way it feels quiet and understated, despite the beautiful desprip. iz x
| Aslan Israel 9/8/06 . chapter 1
Brilliance trapped. Bittersweet, in the end. but oh so beautiful.
| White is a Sin 9/8/06 . chapter 1
*stares blankly* a little confusing. Though a lot of my poems end up like "what the..."
I like it. Great description. I guess i could picture most of it..._
Thanks for the review. I was pretty unsure of that poem _
I like your user name _
| n-Iceness 9/7/06 . chapter 1