There's not really enough here for me to comment on the plot. I won't know what the next chapter is like until reading it, but my suspicion is that this acts more like a part of the first chapter than a prologue. Thus I would highly recommend merging it with the next chapter. If that doesn't make any sense, I apologize.

That said, there is definite potential here, especially with her interest in the music and the effect it has on her. Hopefully you capitalize on this aspect later on.

However you had two problems with this chapter. One was grammar, mostly comma usage (or lack thereof), and the other was diction. Now, I'm something of a diction Nazi in that I'll pick out words which bother me and suggest replacements for them. That doesn't usually mean they require changing, just that I think it might be stronger a different way. Like a Nazi, all my diction is based off of personal preference rather than empirical evidence. Ah well, on to the nitty gritty.

"a band that looked like they had a major hangover." The antecedent for 'they' here is 'band' which doesn't work. How about changing it to 'a band which looked like it had a collective hangover.' That way the antecedent works, and the adjective still makes sense.

'his irritating nagging.' Nagging is irritating almost by definition. Cut the adverb.

'recognised' has a z. 'recognized.'

Either use 'both of them,' 'them both,' or just 'them.' 'the both of them' is awkward here.

'an amount of alcohol that just stopped short of lethal' would be better phrased as 'amount of alcohol just short of being lethal.'

'Matthew, was no where to be seen. ' Comma splice. You only need a comma like that when you're addressing the person directly. e.i. "Mathew, you were no where to be seen!"

"Anne was most likely off with some guy doing, God knows what." Comma splice.

"she saw the band had been" should be 'saw that the band had been.' That situation is one of the ways the English language is a tad awkward. You can't see the band's absence, therefore 'that' is inserted.

"listening to it closely." 'to it' is superfluous, remove it.

"Not the words, the song." Here's where you need that preposition 'Not to the words, but to the song.'

"A lump formed in her throat and even though it defied all the logic and reasoning that she had acquired over her whole life, she felt sad." Should probably have a comma after that first 'and.'

"on lead guitar." My personal preference here would be to make this 'playing the lead guitar' but at the very least make it 'on the lead guitar.'

"it’s" substitute out for 'that's'

"more time but she couldn’t read the expression in his face." Add a comma after 'time.'

Your story's getting interesting. Update soon!

I like your story. Hope you update soon!!

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[God onlyknows what.] I think there should be a space between only and knows.

[singing a song about…She paused, listening to song.] This could probably be a bitter smoother if it went something like "singing a song about... she paused, listening closely." I think there's no need to repeat the word 'song' when it was only used a couple of words before it.

[The guy at the front looked straight at her.] This guy at the front, is he the singer on lead guitar? Or another person watching this band?
If he's the singer, then it would probably sound a bit more smoother if it went something like "He dropped his eyes and they met hers, enveloping the both of them in a moment of silence." (or something like that, if you want to emphasize this special moment) You can use the word 'he' because the sentence before it already says 'Then HE looked at her.'

[And he smiled. And she smiled too.] Instead of using 'And' to start out your sentences (which is something every writer should avoid.. I do it too.. hehe...), you could do it as "He smiled, and her lips curved upwards to smile too". Or something like that.. hehe...

[And she felt like the only person in the crowd. ] Remove the 'And'.

[It was bliss, it was amazing, it was soothing. The song ended and she felt a hand on her shoulder, pulling her away from her fantasy.] Now this was REALLY smooth. A good transition. Great job! :D

[“Hey” she was faced with Jake smiling and holding a bottle out towards her, “Enjoying yourself?”] Edit: "Hey," she faced Jake, who was smiling and holding a bottle out towards her. "Enjoying yourself?"

[“Yeah” she forced out a smile. ] You're missing a comma after 'yeah'.

[“The band’s good”] You're missing a period.

[“Yeah. Tristan puts his heart and soul into his music. I don’t understand any of it personally”] Another period.

[“Yeah, my older brother. The lead guitarist” ] Haha, and another period.

[Tristan waved back and before he started the next song she looked at her one more time and she couldn’t read the expression in his face.] To emphasize the fact that he's looking her again, and something felt different, the second half of the sentence should probably go as "...looked at her once more, but this time, she couldn't read the expression on his face".

Great prologue!! Just a little punctuation problem, and a little rewording would be helpful. :)

I think you've started off pretty well with this chapter; it seems that it could get interesting. I am not one for the whole "love at first sight" thing, or even "feelings at first sight," since it's so overdone, but you've written several chapters, so I'll trust you know what you are doing.

Here are a few nitpicks, since that is what I do:

"doing, God onlyknows what" should be "doing God only knows what"

"He had grey, green eyes" should be "he had grey-green eyes"

“'Yeah'she forced out a smile." should be “'Yeah.' She forced out a smile." You made this mistake in all of the dialogue. If you use a dialogue tag, though ("something," said somebody), then it's a comma, not a period.

"...next song she looked at her one more time" -- "her" should be "him."

That was one hell of a suprise. There were quite a few spellin errors throughout the story and I didn't like how you went from one pov to another without any indication. It was confusing. But keep writing!

How good is this? This isn't good... It's superb! Yes i FINALLY got onto your fp site! soz it took so long. How come I'm not on your favourites list? Talk to you tomoz!pippa- Stef

That chapter was good. I still saw some spelling mistakes but I did like the few twists that were in this chapter. I can't wait to read more!

Nice beginning. There were a few spelling errors that could easily be fixed but other than that I would like to see where this goes. Keep writing!

nice prologue, it sets up the characters personalities, the relationships between characters, and the setting simply, but without being dry. please continue!

-Lefty