so sad, yet so amazingly cute!
x3
I love it!

Ah so sweet. It's making me cry. ;-;

Aw.

^_^ I love it. I'd love a sequel, too. :hintpoke:

xo

I can't believe Nathan called Devin his property. That ** me off :(

I feel so bad for Devin... He's so brainwashed into thinking that Nathan loves him that he'll put up with all that ** to keep him. :(

And I hope Reed makes things all better :)

xo!

Aw sad end to that chapter. :frowns:

Nathan is an...idiot face... :( I hope you end up killing him off or something. XD

I thought Reed was older and Devin was younger XD Guess I was wrong

xo

Ah... I like Reed. His attitude and all that jazz. XD And his name.

Eva...is purely annoying and she was barely even in this.

Hm... I want to hear more about Nathan... :nod:

(Sorry it took me forever to start reading this. I've been lazy.)

xo

Not that this wasn't cool, but I'm confused. What was with, "This is my girlfriend."?

Cool! I thought Devin was done!

Sad story so far.

I'd never ever thought I'd say this; there are too many adjectives. Unlike most people who don't use any at all, this piece has so many that it makes it hard to grasp and sink in, it ruins the flow.

I absolutely LOVE the start-scene. It's one of the most original and emotionfilled I've ever read. But I had a bit of a trouble picturing it and had to read it over because of what I mentioned earlier XD Don't force the word on the paper. Well it DOES say how good your vocabulary is.