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Kyllorac 2008-06-02 ch 18,	abuseHere's your review for winning the RM! This story was one very entertaining read. Nice job on the summary; it really caught my attention. I also really liked the idea behind this story. You put a nice and realistic spin on the cliche girl-pretends-to-be-a-boy scene. Jamie's character in particular was nicely done. It's refreshing to see a girl-acting-the-guy that still retains her femininity. :D The one thing I would have liked to see is the middle-ish chapters fleshed out a bit. The whole misunderstanding between Ashlyn and Jamie felt a bit flat and rushed. Otherwise, though, the pacing was great, and the story was very nicely divided up into chapters. Overall, I really enjoyed this story. n.n
Shorty11857 2008-03-26 ch 18,	abuseSo, I just finished your story (and if you saw my other reviews, I only started reading it a few hours ago) and I have to say that overall I liked it. It wasn't amazing but it was an entertaining, fun, and easy read. I found your characters to be a little annoying at times but that was them not you, and even though you did go into clichés sometimes and there were a few generalisations about certain things, it was overall well written. I wouldn't have minded a little more detail at times and the story to have been flushed out a little more but I guess that's probably not your writing style which is fine, it gave the story that easy/quick read quality which is nice.
Shorty11857 2008-03-26 ch 5,	abuseOkay, I have to admit at first I didn't like this chapter much but then the whole Kevin starting to feel attracted to Jamie and his response to the situation just made me laugh (out loud). I was worried this chapter would be the one that would turn me off the story but instead you've got me hooked. Although I can't say I like your characters much, especially Kevin but that's not an insult or anything. Can't wait to read more.
Shorty11857 2008-03-26 ch 1,	abuseI have to say after reading your summary I just had to read this story, although the first chapter hasn't really dragged me in much seeing as nothing has really happened; but your plot sounds interesting so I'm willing to give it a couple of chapters to get going, before I make a decision on the story. Although right now I'm reading on. more on the back of your summary (and anticipation of what's to come) than my impression of the first chapter.
Rynx-too-genki 2008-03-13 ch 18,	abuseExcellent story! I loved it from start to finish! You reall deserve three cheers for creating such a unique, refreshing story that's both a feel good and emotionally heart wrenching story! Wonderful work!
BlackNhite 2008-02-06 ch 1,	abuseI read the description and just had to read, the temptation was irresistable! I'll give you points for catching my attention so easily... Well, I will say you know how to write; not one error in wording and your punctuation is, admittedly, better than mine. I mean, do you see how I spam commas? Summation: an easy read that anyone can pick up on (broad audiance = more reviews!) Okay, my gripe with "this" chapter is that nothing's really happened. I like to get right into it with my first chap, probably why I usually make them long as all hell. The story's not going anywhere right now, but it's only the first entry so I won't hold it against you. Characters are a little basic as of now but, again, chauk(sp?) it up to this being the first chap. Can't really say anything bad about this story... ... I still want to know where it's going-damn you for seducing me into reading it! I'll be back for more, count on that... By the way, congrats on winning the Review Marathon. 57 reviews... fifty-seven... Are you sure you're human? BlackNhite out...
Kaiyako Kagami 2008-02-04 ch 18,	abuseHey! That was such a good story, I totally loved it! You had an interesting plot it was very well thought out, and yet it still flowed with your style. You didn't use to much detail in this story, but that was one of the main things that I liked because being over detailed with a plot like this may have been a mood-killer. Okay, I'll admit there was a part in like the middle (where she 'asked out' Otto) that I wanted to strangle Ashlyn for being so selfish. But in the end her character worked out well and gave Kevin what he was asking for. Hilarious ending, I hope you see more of you work! Good Work! Kaiyako K.
A Minion Named Onion 2008-01-27 ch 1,	abuseSo I must admit I went into this with at least two ideas made from the summary. And I was pleased to find that they were blown away by the third or fourth chapter, and I found myself liking what I was seeing. Jamie's character is everyone's best friend, and I think anyone would love to be compared to her...I mean, when you're a hot guy and a hot girl, what's not to like? Plus a great friend to boot. Ashlyn...for starters, it's a great name for her character. Actually, all the names work perfectly, so kudos to you, because I'm big on names. She's a little bitchy, but by...chapter 16 or so she's fine. I guess that's kinda late but I wouldn't have it any other way. I liked your use of the IM convos. And of course, thanks for the reviews! You made some interesting points and be sure that they won't be far from my mind when I'm writing the next couple of chapters!
Samantha Elisabeth 2007-12-25 ch 1,	abuseSuper cute story so far. (I've only got through Chapter One so far!) Oh, btw I know a guy with the name Kevin Carson. Lol, he's in or out of college now.
The Ferrett 2007-08-22 ch 18,	abuseThe End. ::))
The Ferrett 2007-08-22 ch 17,	abuseYay! A HEA!
The Ferrett 2007-08-22 ch 16,	abuseHit him!
The Ferrett 2007-08-22 ch 15,	abuseYes conflict resolution. Bad evil kiss but aww lovebirds. ::))
The Ferrett 2007-08-22 ch 14,	abuseAnd she's going to be a ** because she doesn't know whats going on. Hmm.
The Ferrett 2007-08-22 ch 13,	abuseThe little... (lots of abusive words) ID. Kill him bash him I want blood!

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