lol i can sort of relate to this except for the fact i'm not dating anyone lol. just the loving part and him thinking of me diffrent..

Wow...this was what I was going through ALL last year up until the middle of October with my best friend... He saw *or so I thought* me as a little sister...and then things kinda just...changed around d:)

It's a bit choppy and cliched (but I can't fault you for that; most teenagers have poems exactly like this, for whatever reason), but I'm sure people can relate to it. Me excluded.

Try not to tell so much in your poetry -- show your readers what you're going through. Paint us a picture, or tug at our hearts with your words. You can do so much better than this.
-Cristina

oh my gosh.
i went through this,, all year.
i went out with somebody and i became best friends with her best friend. then i liked him. but... it turned out...bad.
ANYWAY--
liked your poem.
its great.
liz

Isn't that just the hardest thing to accept? It just kills me when reading stories that have something like this happnes. anyway, wonderful poem. (:

I really liked the theme and where the poem is going.

I can see from the narrator's perspective, and that's good.

-Helen
PS Thanks for the review!

I went through a situation much like this, and I must say that this is a much shorter summary of teenage "love" in general. If you need to know more about where this comes from I reccomend you to "Maturity Defined."Thank you also for your review of "The Prayer." I wasn't expecting much praise for my work but I just felt like I had an obligation to write it. So yes, thank you for reviewing. Looking foward to reading more of your work,

-Edward 04612

Cool, that's how I feel!

This was some great writing, it is so true sometimes.

it may be random but it fit well together. Its a sad poem, but shows the edge of the girl. how disappointed she is and how she wished it would have ended differently. i can majorly relate to that. Anyway its a great poem update soon!

-Sal.

ooh. tough times... last line was a bit out of the rest of it... good stuff though. "my heart aches for your sweet compassionate touch" is quite lovely. xoxo-xan