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Guilty Angel
2006-10-18
ch 1,
abusei like this. it makes me think. and i also just want to let you know i am going to use the line you sugested. thanks for your help i'll let you know when i upload the revised version of the poem.
Galleena
2006-10-03
ch 1,
abuseI have no idea what happened in this story. I'm sorry, I don't. So, she told her best friend something that she was afraid her friends and family may not accept her about... "People" had told her not to say anything before she'd thought it through but thought WHAT through? Something about her lifestyle? What people are not family and friends? What people anyway?

Oh wait. She likes somebody. I must remember to read the summary first in future...

Okay, bearing that in mind I found what I think are a a few things which need looking at:

“Really?” he friend asked disgusted.Should be her friend?

“No,” her friend denied.Her friend isn't actually denying... She is refusing to believe, I think.

“No you aren’t,” her friend said furiously, “how would be so sick?”Missing a "you" in that final question?

Also, I learned recently that when writing a sentence like the one above it should be as follows:

“No you aren’t,” her friend said furiously. “How (c)ould (you) be so sick?”

Noticed the full stop? Yeah, that's a bit finicky I'll admit and I'm not even sure the person I heard it from was correct but there you have it.

(PING!) Galleena catches on. This is a story about being lesbian isn't it? Or at least having a crush on a girl... It does happen sometimes in puberty I believe, some people discover that it's just a once-off crush, others discover that it's not. It doesn't make anyone a better or worse person.

Anyway, I hope I got it right. You must admit, the whole story does read a bit like that if I was way off the mark!

I didn't know Galleena was actually a name by the way. I assure that I'm not your friend's grandmother!
blue.eyes.can.be.deceiving
2006-09-27
ch 1,
abusei didnt quite get what you were writing a/b, like what the problem was was it a guy that she "couldn't" like?? i have an idea but i'm not sure, i'm sort of lost, and i was thinkuing it had to do with a guy who was hated or something, does it, and if it's the other thing, you might wanna change the rating, just in case some crazed parents get on here.!Ashlyn Marie!
lordelfy
2006-09-23
ch 1,
abusewas she a lesbian? that is what i got from it!
princess max
2006-09-20
ch 1,
abuseShort, simple, painful.
kelsi bones
2006-09-17
ch 1,
abuseThis story really hits home for me. I had a secret just like the girl in this story does. I was absolutely terrified that if I told people, they'd abandon me. Finally, I told my two best friends. They didn't care. Actually, one of them even said they suspected it.

I'm not sure if we have the same secret or not, but if we do, my advice is to only let it out if you're comfortable with it. It took me a year to tell my friends. Don't feel stupid if you're not ready to share, and don't rush it.

Katrina
Love-and- Lust
2006-09-12
ch 1,
abusesweetie i hope that didnt or dosnt happen, really i do. u kno im always here for you to talk to if you need me, just e-mail me even if its like a mile long ill take the time to read it and help yopu. I love you!!
myheartbelongstosuperman
2006-09-09
ch 1,
abuseAh, now this is something that happens ALL the time, but not many people write about it. I really liked it- very sad but oh so true to life.
awannabewriter
2006-09-09
ch 1,
abuseDoes it immitate real life or what? Good one, Liz.
charliecandle
2006-09-09
ch 1,
abuseits interesting. different. i love it!!
CrazyTurtles
2006-09-08
ch 1,
abuseMY LIFE IN PRINT!! I have lived through this same thing, and let me tell you. NOT FUN! But it gets better. Sooner or later the best of them come around and they talk to you again. Just NEVER bring up the guy. Anyway, good work. Keep it up.
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