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| Sara 2008-04-15 ch 20, anon. | abuseThat was one of the sweetest stories I've ever read. No wait...it might be the sweetest. And it still had all that other stuff in it so I didn't gag from the sweetness of it all. So yeah. Loved it. =] |
| Jayjack 2008-03-29 ch 20, | abuseYou can figure out the rest. what a nice last sentence. hahahaha... oh god, that was so cute and it only took me a few hours to read yay!! LOVE it. :D |
| Jayjack 2008-03-29 ch 10, | abuseaw! hahahahahhaa. i love this story. and i'm only half-way through it. "baby, it's fact. our love is true" (sigh) i love hellogoodbye. :D |
| Jayjack 2008-03-29 ch 1, | abusehahahaha. :D what a great start. i love it. love it! haha. well i guess i'm on the the next chapter. EE! :) |
| Nova Light 2008-03-22 ch 9, | abuseCute story. Good write. |
| sweetywheety 2008-03-10 ch 20, | abuseYou are a very talented writer. I really enjoyed this story- it was well written & not rushed in any way. Good job! :) |
| A.K.A. Writer's Block 2008-02-27 ch 20, | abuseVery, very sweet story. I liked it a lot-- not as much as Sebastian Bear, but, still. I am madly in love with that one, so it would be hard for ANYTHING to measure up. Anyway, you're my new favourite author here on FP, you should win your skow award, i adore this story, and i want more! heh... that sounded really greedy. anyway, love, isabel. |
| AJS 2008-02-24 ch 20, | abuseAww, cute :) So I'm assuming that Grove & Ella ended up at the same college huh? Is Ella her full name? Or is it short for something like Isabella? Anyways, I like this story a lot. I like especially how you depicted a relationship how one normally goes... without all that drama that readers are usually taken through just in order to see the couple together. I mean, a couple can get together without a big explosion too, right? It was really sweet just to read about the typical nerves that people get when they're first getting to know a guy, and I think you depicted that image really well :) One thing though was the last names. In chapter 2, you had Ella'a father's last name as Frost, but then you switched it all to Gardener. I think you switched Adam's last name throughout the story too. And then at one point I think you wrote the way Adam kissed Grace, instead of Hanz... which if you think about it, it's kind of disturbing, lol. And in the last chapter, you changed Gregory's name to Richard, while his best friend was saying his Best Man's speech. I think that was the only real big thing that bothered me. There were of course some typos here and then but everyone does those and I got by okay :) Anyways, I think this is a really sweet story, and I definitely enjoyed it a lot. Adam really did seem kind of bipolar though. He was okay in the beginning... I would have actually thought that there would be more beef directly between Adam and Grove, but I guess not. I wonder what about Ella that caught Grove's interest in the first place :) Annyywayyss, I actually stumbled upon this story because I wanted to read your other story, but it's still incomplete and I like to read finished stories so that I'm reading it all at once. So yeah. I hope you continue updating that new story and to read more by you soon! :) -- Alyssa |
| Lulu Jones 2008-02-19 ch 20, | abuseHey! I don't know if you still read these or not but I thought I would give it a try. I was wondering if the ring at the end is an engagement ring? Yeah... anyway I love your story! |
| gulistanlik 2008-02-10 ch 20, | abuseOh WOW! I really liked this fic in that the two main characters were together right from the start and rather looking at how they get together, we witnessed how their physical attraction towards each other blossomed into something more. That was excellent. Well done! I like journeys. ^_^ I think I'll go check out your other fics actually.And man is Adam such a bastard. He never changed, he was like that all along. T_T gulistanlik |
| SamanthaNicole 2008-02-01 ch 1, | abuseGreat opening line. I always tend to struggle with mine, so it's always great to see really good ones. I like the interaction between Ella and Grove. The dialogue is good, and pretty believable. I'm not sure if random strangers would kiss another stranger's battle wounds, so to speak, but hey, it's your story! You can do what you want. And I think Ella's reaction was great. Just a few minor things: [She heard her name a eight or nine times before she realized...] You don't need the 'a' here :-) [“You walked right into that boys fist.”] 'Boys' should have an apostrophe. [They were oblivious to her injury or maybe they didn’t care. They were oblivious to her injury or maybe they didn’t care.] 'They were either oblivious to her injury, or maybe they just didn't care' might make more sense. When referring to 'Piercing' and 'Tattoo' as people, you're going to want to capitalize the names, since we don't know their real ones just yet. [She was attracted but was writing the drawing affect he had on her as confusion.] I reread this sentence numerous times, and maybe it's just me, but it doesn't really make sense. When I found your story through SKoW, I had a feeling this would be good. Let's just say I wasn't disappointed! I'll be back for seconds, definitely. You're got something good here. --Sammy-- |
| marikamaroca 2008-01-23 ch 20, | abuseAmazing (: |
| Jessica Wolfheart 2008-01-15 ch 20, | abuseI love this story! I want a Grove :] Adam is a major dick. I want to kick his **. But El and Grove and Ray took care of that already so I think I'm good. Mad props for the story! :D |
| Jessica Wolfheart 2008-01-15 ch 10, | abusehahaha I love Waffle House but... -sigh- there's none in California :[ |
| GANGSTAR 2008-01-04 ch 1, | abuseI love this story since it involves a hot guy with a lip ring. Excellent story. |