aww does she have a name :( yeah I should probly stop doing the whole "update now" thing in reviews...soo Its really good even if it is short :)

I like the whole idea of the story and how it is written, but there's just two things:1) In the beginning, the first part is just one big paragraph. I think that if you split it into two or more,then it wouldn't seem so monstrous to have to read.2) This is just a question that arised while I was reading: What does 'Tanya Awra' mean? Is it a new language you made up for the characters? If so, it seems a bit out of place, like a little extra thing you added to make the paragraph longer. Other than that I can't find a single flaw. Keep up the good work!