this is gorgeous. i love "...until you didn't know/where i ended and the heavens began." and all of stanza three, but especially "for each time we moved the universe moved with us/you always knew that life revolved around you." and i love how the ending doesn't pack a punch, it almost leaves you waiting, like you're drifting in nothingness. i think it complements the style of the poem perfectly. well done.

I love the part about dreams.. its not really personification, but rather making them tangible.. and the ending about him leaving is gorgeous

veery poetic.
then, it is a poem.
i seem to remember you mentioning the whiskey/whisky issue
please keep writing holz!
syeph

ps didt realise ou had written so much on here!! 60? I cant manage finishing one!

god, those last three lines :|... gorgeous, so empathic. the whole thing is just... mindbendingly beautiful..

wow this is so beautiful. the first thing that struck me was the idea of 'september's watch' which immediatly conjured up images for me. i really like the idea, and the writing was just beautiful.it was hauntingly sad.

I am short of words. The format is quite fitting for this piece, the imagery is brillantly executed and it's a quite deep piece. I thank you for this delightful read. - ADD-san

A truly beautiful poem, with some of the best imagery I've seen in a while. Excellent work, indeed!

ooh it makes me shiver :)

Ok, where to start first please dont consider this a 'review' because I dont think I have the right to put my opinion to what someone elses heart wrote, but in saying that I think you are great, everything thing that I have read of yours i can relate to, I really like it. i think that is a mark of a great writer when numerous other people can relate even if they dont find the same 'meaning' in what you have written.

I noticed

The clouds had fallen away as you walked.

i love that line. the whole thing is beautifully put together. iz xx

"“I’ll keep them safe” is all you said before you left"

I adored that line. I adored this whole poem. The imagery in this is delicately drawn, the dialogue believable, and the ending perfectly ambiguous. Keep writing.