this paints a very descriptive picture... i like it. ^_^

hey, i really wanted to let you know that ive been reading your work for a while now (although i only just recently got one of these accounts on here!) and i admire everything you write so much! its funny too, cause i write poetry also, and its sort of the same kind

but theres a waiting period before i can upload any of mine... :(

I like it =) ending is nice and nice imagery to me anyways xp

I love this one. It's biting and realistic.

"You tasted like oranges and charcoal." I love this line the best.

The ending fit perfectly as well.