Another story I love lol Anyway, sure, there are a few errors here and there, but nothing too major. In addition, if possible, you should italicize the dragon's thoughts. For example, instead of having Cavalry? Alton thought, you should italicize "Cavalry?" Other than that, the only other thing I see is that in some instances, the dragon is given human qualities, such as "scoop[ing] the girl up in his hands"...You could replace "hands" with "claws" or something to that effect ;) Still a great story, though; I look forward to reading more :D

I enjoyed this, keep up the good work

Hey hows it going. Some things you should do is not say "Norfolt dragon" so much, you only need it like once in the prelude and yoru good to go. Also, describe what he looks like more, because some of the characteristics you used like "his face was covered in sweat" was something like a human, so is it like a humanoid type dragon.. thing, or a cliche dragon? And also, what is a norfolt dragon...?