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| general-maseltov 2008-02-23 ch 10,   | Is there any chance you might update soon? |
| InuNekoKitsune21 2007-06-15 ch 10, | OMG! You updated! Damn, they got caught. That sucks! It was a good chapter. Found a couple of spelling errors, but nothing to serious. Update soon! |
| Boogyoogy 2007-05-14 ch 6, | "'He is?' Trayc asked as Aaron said, 'I am?' Trayc looked at Aaron who said, 'I meant…of course I am.'" Annoyingly cliched and over-used... try to be original, but never the less I do like this story |
| Boogyoogy 2007-05-14 ch 5, | Good story... I am interested in more of a plot twist this one was kind of... predictable? |
| InuNekoKitsune21 2007-05-08 ch 9, | I love Aaron! He's fantastic! It was a good chapter. ^_^ |
| InuNekoKitsune21 2007-04-28 ch 8, | Aaron stole something, again? Jeez. Well, okay, so it's not so surprising. |
| InuNekoKitsune21 2007-04-28 ch 7, | Lol, I love Aaron. He's fantastic! It was a good chapter. ^_^ |
| InuNekoKitsune21 2007-04-10 ch 5, | Oh, that was wicked. Adrian had no idea what hit him. I like Trayc. Oh and there was once that you spelled Trayc's name Tracy. Just thought to point that out for you. ^_^ It was fantastic. |
| InuNekoKitsune21 2007-04-10 ch 4, | A baby?? Wow, poor Adrian. The guy with amber orbs is a little weird... I like it how Adrian just smirked and threw the boy into the fountain. That was pretty funny. ^_^ |
| InuNekoKitsune21 2007-04-10 ch 3, | Ravner = ass. A major one. Poor Adrian. That's sad. P_P it was a good chapter though! |
| InuNekoKitsune21 2007-04-10 ch 2, | OMG, OMG, OMG. She hit him in the face. OMG, OMG, OMG. Not good. Not good at all. O.O It was a funny chapter, a really funny chapter. ^_^ |
| InuNekoKitsune21 2007-04-10 ch 1, | It was good. Minor mistakes, which you know. “Dr. Von Garret fears that if the government were to get a hold of him they would kill him without remorse. Experiment 14915 doesn’t deserve to die; he isn’t even a year old. Von Garret has chosen you to take care of him. They will not be able to find him this way. What say you?” Last sentence doesn't make sense. housing,but -spacing error. aglance -spacing error. And that's all I found. ^_^ |
| Boogyoogy 2006-11-13 ch 4, | DUDE! I like this story, but in my opinion it needs to have longer chapters and more substance to them, but I like them so far! |
| Boogyoogy 2006-10-18 ch 3, | O.K. Very good... A little on the repetitive side... I mean you weren't repeating exactly but you were saying the same things in like synonyms... |
| Boogyoogy 2006-10-10 ch 2, | Hahahahaha funny interested in keeps happening. I wanna kick the (bad word) out of Paris... w/e though they are just fictional characters *breath* *breath* O.K. I am good! CONTINUE THIS STORY! I'll be waiting... |