 Trajik 2006-12-28 . chapter 1 Um... well, where do I begin. Perhaps with saying that I didn't get nearly through all of this - I could tell after reading the first few lines that it wasn't going to be worth my time. You should SLOW DOWN. Take some time to describe the characters and their surroundings, because, seriously, I have no idea what's going on, who's there, or why it matters.
Try again. |