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| Crossing the Rubicon 2006-11-25 ch 1,  | abuseKiller last line. I think that most people would understand what you borrowed, so no worries. :) |
| review 2006-11-13 ch 1, | abusesuperb usage of carry-in notation. bravo! |
| Prideful Mutt 2006-09-13 ch 1, | abuseI love it! And the explination at the end shows that you really have an intrest in your own writting and others. I love Romeo and Juliet and W.S.! Peace, Fairies and Coffee Tink |
| helpless-pretender 2006-09-12 ch 1, | abuseVery nice. I liked the fluency alot. Keep writing! p.s. thanks for the review! |
| DansMandy 2006-09-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is really good! I think I'm gonna go read some more of your work. I liked how you added in parts of the play into your poem. Good job! |
| Aluminum Tinkerbell 2006-09-12 ch 1, | abuseAww... Very eloquent. Nice convaying on emotions as well! "I fell so gracelessly in love, Crash-landing on Cupid’s borrowed wings (You kissed by the book)." I love those lines. ^^ |
| CrazyTurtles 2006-09-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is good, and has a good meaning. Thanks for the review btw. Keep writing! ~Turtles |
| Tenebrific 2006-09-12 ch 1, | abuseAfter having been required to read Romeo and Juliet (and watching the older movie without pretty boy what's his name) I caught them all without the A/N. Great Poem, keep writing |
| DemonicDestiny 2006-09-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is great. It's interesting how you put everything. Keep writing. |
| Your Judith 2006-09-12 ch 1, | abuseIts so simple, but it does wonders in catching the youths love and life in an eligant read! -Otohime |
| Default Life 2006-09-12 ch 1, | abusewow, this was great! I love Romeo and Juliet (it's the only shakespeare i've actually read) and this was a great like, summary of the whole story! |
| lessons you learn 2006-09-12 ch 1, | abuseWow, this is gorgeous! Even though you borrowed phrases from a book, I could never make it sound half as beautiful. "“Let me be your Romeo, baby...”We were doomed from the beginning."One of my favorite parts in this poem. Just...wow, lovely imagery. I'm usually not into poems that aren't close to my style, but this is just...fantastic. Keep it up ^^ |
| okalright 2006-09-12 ch 1, | abusevery good, i really like the line, "A tragic romance Or a romantic tragedy?" |
| happypills03 2006-09-12 ch 1, | abuseamazing! i absolutley love it |
| Emy Snicket 2006-09-11 ch 1, | abuseVery Good! I loved how you worked in the lines that alluded to R&J. Seemingly simple but has depth/layers. Beautiful. :) -Emy Snicket |