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| jessieleigh916 2008-07-13 ch 1,   | wow, thats all i can say. my sister told me that you were the only one to write a haiku that actually touched her. and i have to agree. |
| m1randa 2008-04-21 ch 1, | Concise yet effective. |
| Chidori Nadare 2007-07-03 ch 1, | Everyone is like this at one point in their life. Simple and straightforward. I like this. good job. -C.N |
| ecwix 2007-05-21 ch 1, | It's amazing how just a few words can spark a long train of thought. In my own opinion, I'm not experiencing the same feelings as you are when regarding the purpose of one's life, but that still doesn't really make me appreciate this haiku any less. :) |
| a silenced revolution 2007-05-19 ch 1, | Yeah, I did too. Probably everyone has felt like that. Great haiku. |
| CHIIJOY 2007-02-26 ch 1, | I think that too sometimes. Relate-able and to the point. I like. :D |
| Basara 2006-09-13 ch 1, | yes, everyone does... nice... |
| Joy 2006-09-12 ch 1, | thanks for making me feel bad :( , very good though...hits home... |
| sleeping Pisces 2006-09-12 ch 1, | The title and summary drew me to this haiku. Both were exquisitely executed. The reason I love this haiku so much, apart from the fact it’s depressingly relatable, is the simple way it’s written. It has been a while since I last read a haiku with such power expressed in each syllable, and yet lacking any sort of imagery at all, and yet does not suffer from that fact. Even the actual look of the haiku helps create the illusion of simple, no title above the haiku, no signature below it and the space between each line all make for a perfectly presented haiku. I wish I had some constructive criticism for you, but as far as 'non-imagery' haikus go, this is as good as a masterpiece. Peace, Daze |
| Ygg 2006-09-12 ch 1, | I was drawn to your poem by the well-expressed summary.. but I didn't expect to see such a sad poem.. if everyone's lives were meaningless, we would never even be born in the first place.. but that's only my idea :) I like the simplicity of the words.. so much strength and weakness hidden inside them. Great work! |