Reviews for This was all to Keep you from Noticing

Reviews For: This was all to Keep you from Noticing

mizu no kokoro 2006-10-13 ch 1,	abusewow... i'm speechless... profound, yet dark in a way... great work keep writing
Nobody-n-Particular 2006-10-07 ch 1,	abuseTragic intensity
sapphire_shine89 2006-10-04 ch 1, anon.	abuseOkay, my bad but it ends happy :P sorta...
faerie-gumdrops 2006-09-27 ch 1,	abuseVery beautifully written - i love the description of 'him' and the moment between them. Just filled with gorgeously intense lines.
XxParalaixX 2006-09-22 ch 1,	abuseNow, /I/ don't understand and I'm kind of scared. p.s. I am aware I didn't finish the trilogy. I plan to someday. Keep faith.Second, I was just wondering what you didn't understand in my current story because naturally as the author, /I/ know what's happening but I'd like to know what I can improve for readers.
lackluster 2006-09-18 ch 1,	abusethe musltiple 'yes'/'no' sounds like an interrigation. yeah, i love that. 'white-knuckled liar.' favorite.
poet tree 2006-09-16 ch 1,	abuseDelicately but too late, we've all exploded anyway. Artfully declared, the doctor's office is a nicely painted portrait. And of course the Dresden Dolls - I was wondered who'd get that reference...
faking closure 2006-09-15 ch 1,	abusehm interesting. i always wonder where people get inspiration. and im tired as hell, so woo! -naomi
diffident 2006-09-15 ch 1,	abuseAs it started out, I didn't much fancy it, but as it unfolded I began to like it, and very much so at that. You portrayed the doctor's office very very subtly, which was nice. It kind of reminds me of the doctor's office in Garden State. I need to watch that again. The perspective in this is so vague and subtle. It adds a mysterious kind of mist over all that's happening, like we're not sure what we see. "i could hear his cracked voice explain he wasn't hungry, he was happy, he wasn't boney, he was fair..." Brilliant way of informing the readers of his ailment. "...his name was less important than the wrinkles in my jeans" and "this was all to keep you from noticing" are so delicate in meaning and perception. It's a shame I understand them so well. marie
the.pink.life 2006-09-13 ch 1,	abuseGod, this is gorgeous. I want to have written every word in this myself. It is perfect. It's one of those poems where nothing quite seems to make sense, but at the same time, it makes perfect sense. Crazy. Every line has something about it that I love, and it took me a second reading to realize how much I really do love this poem. Obviously, I'm favoriting this piece. Keep writing! :)
Moondog Dozier 2006-09-12 ch 1,	abuseThis is a marvelously well worded rush of feeling. I love the pace, it ebbs, and escalates so swiftly and smoothly, nearly grabbing the reader's hand, and guiding him forward. I like how this is descriptive, but not pinpoint descriptive. It is relatable by the fact that enough detail is given to interpret the emotion, but not specifically individualized. I also like how the speaker bounces the flow off of the action, and continues the pace while still slipping in gems of phrasework and word turns that make the reader hear, see and feel what is going on, which is quite a difficult thing to achieve. The tone and speed are extraordinary. As you can tell, I like this one quite a bit. A definite favorite, as I still hear the words bouncing along the emotional rope that you've given the reader. Powerful, excellent work. MD:77.
FunkyFlower17 2006-09-12 ch 1,	abusewow...this was a lil on the too-mysterious side for me, but i loved the way it flows and the imagery you created. nicely done and thank you for all ur absolutely wonderful reviews :P ~mez~
drippingdreams 2006-09-11 ch 1,	abuseNicely done! Very poetic and fluid. It reads the way thoughts would, if you could actually condense them into words (which you just can't). As my Creative writing teacher once said to me: "shake yah prose thang." Okay, so maybe that wasn't the best thing to quote... I like the lines about the paper heart, and all the original, slightly strange descriptions! :)
EnigmaticArsenic 2006-09-11 ch 1,	abuseyay- something new from you. ^_^ (by the way, who's turn is it to write? i can't remember if i've replied...) i find this reminiscent of sitting in the waiting room of the counselor's office in school, or the principal's- not that i'm a frequent visitor of any sort of institution. prefer to fly under the radar because i can't stomach recognition in the positive or negative. anywho, strangely enough this reminds me of a scene i've got floating around my own brain pertaining to a certain story so just to let you know if it pops up- i already thought it beforehand. lol. (i hate creativity theft, but then again it makes the world go 'round.) i like the choppy feel, kinda like slurred, hyperactive thoughts pushing at one another to escape. and the somewhat eerie feeling of watching and being watched. as for your a.a: already blown myself to pieces. once again, nice.

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