Wow the beginning of this sounds exactly like what I've delt with- I'm excited to see how this turns out!

Era bien. It was more uneventful than most stories I've read and with less drama, more normal. Pero . . .. . . . . demasiado alegre y facil, digo. Demasiado perfecto. La vida no sucede esta' vi'a . . . para la mayori'a de nosotros. Me gusta que Dios era interwoven into even the mundanest parts of their lives, pero me parece un poco . . . no se' como decirlo. They didn't really connect completely with individuals or empathize with troubles and they both seemed almost too good to be true, nearly unhuman. But I couldn't put it down and now I'm running late . . . .

pero porque leah no puede hacerlo? tendra' un bebe en su esto'mago pero porque?

Ella no supo? Por que'? Era tan obvioso!

Cris se hizo un cristiano y toda su vida se hizo perfecta? Pienso que la temptacio'n le causari'a dan~o y Dios le ayudari'a destruirlo.

Me parece demasiado alegre. La mayori'a de los estudiantes universitarios no pensari'an como Tyler, digo. Y Abby le dijo a 'el la verdad simpa'ticamente. Pero . . . no puedo dejar de leer.

Ella me parece como una chica que conozco. Algo que nunca he sentido. Algo que existe en las partes finitas del mundo donde la vida parece asi'.

Si las cosas fueran tan fa'cil asi'. . .

hello,

i was rereading this story today and an interesting thought struck me: your characters don't struggle. They don't second-guess themselves. They never seem to doubt God's will - or to doubt it for very long. If you are thinking of expanding or revising this story, perhaps you might think of adding more emotional struggles. I know many devout Christians for whom the Christian life is a struggle, and in some ways, their stories are the most interesting ones to tell. Was Abigail never tempted to go "further" with Joe? Was Joe never tempted himself? Did he ever find living a "sold-out life" difficult, and struggle at times with the temptation to compromise his values?

love the scavenger hunt!

interesting! i'm reading through Acts right now... it's delightfully trippy. Gotta love Paul.

Suggestion for this chapter - how about characterizing Chris a bit more? How about have him toss some expressions from his own culture into his story? Part of the appeal of evangelical Christianity is its personal relationship with the Almighty, and Chris' recitation of Christian doctrine comes off as slightly canned.

Even though I'm only on Chapter Two, I think that this story is amazing. It is so hard to find a story written with such obvious faith. Some other stroies have that, yes, but don't outrightly say that they are living for God. As a young Christian, I find it difficult to find literature that doesn't base the plot on sex and drugs. This story is truly a "lily among thorns". Thank you for showing me that there is Christain literature on this site. God Bless.

Don't tell me . . . the Lawson's child due in September will be a daughter, which you'll use to write a sequel for the next generation involving the son and the Lawson daughter. Or am I wrong?

I absolutly loved it! It isn't very often you can find a beautiful, well-written, Christian love story, and I think this was the best I have ever read! Keep on writing!

I have a suggestion, how about adding real drama to the story. I'll admit, I didn't get passed the 8th chaptert. I understood the message you were sending about keeping Christ first in your life and I agree. However, your story was kind of...I don't know...boring. No, boring is not the right word. It was vague and rushed. I don't know, I can't explain it. I'm sorry, I'm not trying to be mean or rude or anything.