A statement that preceded 'he exclaimed' actually ended with a question mark.

All you honestly need to do is omit unessesary remarks especially if they've been established in the chapter before that.

Basic rule of possesion in nouns:

When the subject ends with s, it doesn't need a "'s" but only the quote.

I was really peeved by "Russ's hands."

After that, the story is pretty likeable. The i-don't-care-about-much tone is good, however simplification might have more impact.

I was wondering when you're going to update?

cute! i like!

Interesting story!
more please

oo i really like it so far, please continue soon yes?

i dont know why but i happen to really fancy this nikki character...anyways! love skyler and hope to hear more of this story soon yeah?

I liek this story. It definatly is projecting the demise of the world and I like it. I can't wait the main storyline to start.

Whoa, this is good. I'll need to read Ch2 later on. Il ove the post-apocoliptic setting.

You rock. I want to read more.