Reviews for Things loved, things protected

Reviews For: Things loved, things protected

J. Stearns 2007-01-16 ch 8,	All I can say is: thank God Dean got what was coming to him. What? Why are you looking at me like that? Hey, you’re the one that made me hate him so much. The guy is a monster through and through, not worth a shot at redemption and certainly not getting one. The part when he said that “those kids might not be mine” provided a little bit of clarity to his motives, and as far as I’m concerned: that’s what Amelia did to really tick him off. Secondly, however, is the issue of Elli and Julian, who spent THREE DAYS out on their own. Did I read that correctly? Three days? Not one, not two, but three! A four-year-old rape victim and her five-year-old brother are suddenly resourceful and intuitive enough to survive without a parent? Huh. Them’s some purty amazing kids, right there, yes sir. Were they always like that? I guess they got the good genes, huh? Oh, and Elli’s not traumatized or anything. She’s fine. I’m usually a fan of fluff unless I’m writing it, but the last chapter was pretty sweet. Although, it was weird that, when confronted with an animal (Dean’s an animal, by the way), it is perfectly okay to throw out any inhibitions and do whatever you have to in order to get away from him. Did you know that your story condones running away? Yes, there’s a happy ending and the kids ran away for good reason, but it was weird, that’s all. I will admit, however, that the story as a whole was highly emotional and that, I believe, is what you were really going for this whole time. Well, kudos to you! I had a fun time reading this! Thank you for sharing!
J. Stearns 2007-01-16 ch 6,	Well, you definitely should win an award for "most shocking." I really don't know what to say. It is apparent now that you REALLY want us to hate Dean and Thomas. I mean, I'd be crazy not to, right? First, they won unjustly, making things seem hopeless for poor Amelia. But instead of redeeming himself, Dean the father goes and does something unforgivable. You probably planned this from the start, right? Way before I started reviewing and "giving advice"? I was hoping for characters that are multi-dimensional. There's really no point in hoping for that anymore. In a sick scene, you've shown us that Dean is a villain completely unworthy of mercy. Honestly, for someone to allow that as his first act as a father is... terrifying and disgusting. But, I suppose those two characters need to smirk and be smug about something--heck, they've been smug throughout this whole fic--so having Thomas molest Elli is the best way to keep that up, I guess. Congradulations. You've succeeded in making me hate Dean with every fiber of my being.
J. Stearns 2007-01-16 ch 5,	“I’m never going to be okay until that man is locked up.” -Amelia Yules You've improved considerably since I last reviewed. (And I apologize, by the way, for not reading this in a while.) I loved how you gave a bit of insight into Dean's character. It was subtle, but it was there nonetheless. Maybe we'll learn why he's doing this, and maybe we'll see things from his point of view. It was an interesting choice for you to shift the appearance of evil to Dean's lawyer, who is now the devil-incarnate, as Dean was not just two chapters ago. I won't necessarily agree with that choice, but I'm not complaining either. Amelia's predicament is quite a realistic one, and I applaud you for that. I'm not speaking in terms of her feud with Dean; I'm speaking in terms that she might very well lose the case because of something she did in the past. I like how you're communicating that things are way more complicated than simply black and white. The same philosophy, however, should apply to Dean, not just the protagonist. If we're allowed to root for Amelia even though she did drugs, shouldn't we be able to see how Dean's past shouldn't keep him from the children he loves? Lastly, the kiss at the end was nice. It was expected, but nice. You wrote it delicately and didn't rush the mood, allowing the readers to fully take in the ambiance and relish in the bliss of a kiss. Thank you for sharing! PS- I put that quote at the top to emphasize that it's my favorite one of the chapter. Amelia still thinks that Dean is a walking demon and absolutely won't be able to breathe safely until he's back in the pit for good. Maybe that will change...
Ollie May 2006-11-30 ch 8,	okay, totally did a girly shriek of my own when I read this chapter. I'm so happy for them! Especially the kids, this makes me infinitely happier knowing that Simon will be the dad to them that they deserve. Brilliant stuff, doll! Congratulations on finishing another story and I eagerly await anything else from you! Ollie May
Ollie May 2006-11-26 ch 6,	On the one hand, I'm impressed that you wrote out the kids getting taken back to their father and the pedophile scene with Mr. Thomas and Elli. Not many authors would have the guts. On the other hand, I'm this close to tears over what happened to Elli! That is the most disgusting of perversions, adults that do that to children don't deserve the gift of life. I hope Julian knows what he's doing, though I seriously doubt it. He's only five, there's only so much he can do. Please continue soon Ollie May
Ollie May 2006-11-09 ch 5,	ohmigod. He kissed her! And where the heck are Mr. and Mrs. Hitchcock? I really liked them, I hope they're not hurt. Poor Julian, people forget how stressful these things can be on a child. My uncle is divorcing his psycho wife and their child, my six year old cousin, is getting pulled this way and that. It's not fair that it has to happen to kids so young. Brilliant stuff doll, so glad to see you updated! Ollie May
Ollie May 2006-10-24 ch 4,	ohmigod. He tried to kidnap Elli! If this man was real I'd shoot him. Amelia HAS to get her kids! Fantastic stuff, I haven't felt this much emotion when reading something off of FP in a very long while. Ollie May
J. Stearns 2006-10-23 ch 4,	Wow, Dean and Thomas are utter antagonistic monsters! There seems to be nothing more to them than that. I don't know if that was your intent, but it certainly came out that way. We still don't know how the case will be judged, but I'm willing to bet that it'll be in Amelia's favor, as if that wasn't obvious enough. A surprising little incident popped up there, I'd say, with the pseudo-kidnapping of Elli. Not entirely sure who the kidnapper was, but I am again willing to bet that it was Dean. Who else would be so demonic and devious and evil? It had to be him. Well, whether or not this is the end of your tale, I'm glad I had the privelege to read it. It was quite an experience. Thank you for sharing!
J. Stearns 2006-10-23 ch 3,	After reading Chapters 2 and 3, I've learned that a lot of these characters are pretty one-dimensional. I do like, however, the possibility that Amelia can lose the case, but the odds are so obviously in her favor that it's highly unlikely she will. Dean is portrayed with absolutely no human or redeeming side, which is a shame. I thought for a second when you labelled this "romance" that Dean would show Amelia his reform and they would get back together. Chapters 2 and 3 present strong evidence against that motion, and it seems the romance here lies with Simon Reed, the "pretty man." Reed is probably the most interesting of the characters, in my opinion, because he represents what Dean might have been like before Amelia married him and had kids: determined, strong, powerful, with an arrogant streak. However, the likelihood that Amelia will admit the possible similarity between Reed and Dean is just as likely as if dogs were to stop licking themselves. I look forward to seeing some more insight into Amelia's past with Dean to know what attracted her to him in the first place. It could, after all, be the same thing that's attracting her to Simon Reed. Overall, well done! Too bad the characters are one-dimensional, though. Maybe that will change!
J. Stearns 2006-10-20 ch 1,	Just by reading the prologue and first chapter, I can tell that this is going to be a great story. Knock on wood. I thoroughly enjoyed the first chapter very much, and you write in a great amount of suspense and emotion, just enough for the audience to handle (and still, somewhat, leaving us wanting more). In my opinion, it's a little too early for me to judge if the characters are one-dimensional or multi-dimensional, mainly because I haven't learned that much about them yet. Hopefully, the next few chapters will tell. Overall, great job! You should be commemorated for such an outstanding piece of work! I look forward to reading more!
Ollie May 2006-09-27 ch 3,	I like Simon. He's a persistent son of a **, what is there not to like? Fantastic stuff babe, please continue soon! Ollie May
Ollie May 2006-09-19 ch 2,	Yay! That was a quick update, I'm happy for it. Although I have to say that Dean had me very worried there at the beginning. I do love Julian for taking care of his mother like he did. And you really have to wonder on what grounds does Dean have for getting custody of his children, he was in jail for domestic abuse for god's sake! I hope this lawyer kicks his ** to jail again. Fabulous stuff, doll. And you're so great, I totally love your stories too! Continue soon. Ollie May
Starox200 2006-09-19 ch 2,	Hm...interesting. Not usually what i read but the writing was really vivid. This chapter was kind of fast though. Not really a problem since you carried it off pretty well. Amelia seems very much the abused spouse (ex-spouse), is this going to be with the lawyer then? Him trying to get her to trust him. Very M&B. A good thing by the way. I actually stopped reading Boons a long while ago (three years. lol) but i'll give this a try.Oh right. "Anytime pass..." Should be "anytime past..." Little thing i noticed at the end.Cheers!Starox.
Ollie May 2006-09-19 ch 1,	Oh no! Dean can't come back! Make it better! That was amazing writing, you're excellent at conveying emotions. Please continue as soon as you can! Ollie May

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