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| Grayhome 2007-04-06 ch 1,  | abuseVery touching, very sweet. You have some deep theology running through you. Some things might be over-described, but that might just be because I have a low attention span, but it kinda seemed to slow down the story a bit - then again, there isn't much of a plot going on here, and so description is good for creating a mood. Anyway, I hope I've given you something to think about even if this is an incredible incoherent review. |
| Unsociably Acceptable 2006-10-22 ch 1, | abuseVery nice, I like the disription of the moon and stuff, I really liked it. : ) Keep writin! |
| Reaper 2006-09-25 ch 1, | abuseThat was amazing, nice usage of wording. Personally, religion isn't my thing but this is good. I like it. ~Reaper |
| EmptynessFilled 2006-09-16 ch 1, | abuseThanks, man. i needed something to calm my nerves. i had the busiest day in the past 3 months today, and I've just now(at 10:35 p.m.) sat down to the computer. This really helps releive stress. This was a great first attempt at serious fiction. Such a short peice with such great power. |
| Xn-v 2006-09-15 ch 1, | abuseGreat work! I agree with everything that's been said about it so far - keep it up! |
| Bob Evans 2006-09-13 ch 1, | abuseGood work. Maybe if some people would realize this, then there wouldn't be so much depression... ~Bob Evans |
| scotti 2006-09-12 ch 1, | abuse"How much more did he care for me"...how much more... this litte phrase left me speachless. You have done a wonderful, heartfelt job here, and your descrpitions are beautiful and vivid. You truly do have a God given talent for writing; whether it be funny stuff or serious. Bravo,and God Bless. ~Scottie |
| Turtlesurfthewaves 2006-09-12 ch 1, | abusepretty good, I know how dis feels. It reminds me of dat story, based on true facts about a woman who didn't believe in God and just by watching a spider did. She realised dat evolution couldn't have taught da spider to weave a web of brillance. |
| heresyisforlosers 2006-09-12 ch 1, | abuseOmgosh... I love this! It's so true. If God did spend so much time on something so...deadish, then how much time did he spend on me? I love that perspective! sb |