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| cup of glee and sparkles 2008-05-21 ch 1,   | I really like this one, too. The last verse is probably my favorite. It's really honest-- 'cause it's so true. We all love beauty, but beautiful people have this easy in. They're not evil though. |
| Maranwe Telrunya 2008-05-17 ch 1, | I like it. The italicised words really add punch and drama to the body of the poem. Nicely done. ~Maranwe |
| black*tears*of*innocence 2007-01-01 ch 1, | NOT YOUR BEST?? are you kidding? this is great, wolfeh! it's so seductive and pretty at the same time. you make him, you take him, you break him. the poor pathetic boy. haha, i love your attitude in this poem. it's like you're torturing the boy and enjoying every moment of it. you're not pathetically in love or hopelessly heartbroken. very nicely done! i enjoyed every line, love! you have improved so much and i'm so happy! both you AND plinky are progressing wonderfully in your writings and i'm so proud of you two! (*hugs*) keep writing forever and always! luv always, ~Davida ;P |
| angelfire25 2006-11-24 ch 1, | not your best?! BLIMEY if thats not your best I cant wait to see your best. This poem is fantastic. I dont know why but it reminds me of Poison Ivy out of Batman except more remorseful. LOVED IT! |
| free-to-dream15 2006-10-24 ch 1, | Loved it! COMPLETELY loved it! Keep on writing! PS: trust me I know how you feel, I just recently got back on fp cause i finally updated and i have 70 updates to read! |
| LavenderFox-Daisy 2006-09-29 ch 1, | hey you! this is absolutely mind-blowing, really riveting, i like the whole concept of a tyranical seducer. evilness is always fun! it's really interesting to read, certainly one of your best peices of poetry! a great tearjerker and full of emotion |
| Alex Bowing 2006-09-17 ch 1, | Hello, this is a very good poem. It has a simple but well-constructed style. I find it rather evil; the voice of someone relishing his/her success in the destruction of a lover. You are a very gifted writer. Keep going. Thank you for your review. |
| The Ponderer 2006-09-14 ch 1, | hello. you're officially crazy. this poem is SPECTACULAR! it's so... freaky. i like how you've done it: the layout is so clear, eerily 'blank', and the poem's ending... wow. you feel crushed. yet another fave story... |
| braindead1345 2006-09-13 ch 1, | Whats wrong with it? i think its pretty and has it looks like some thought when into the words you used... |
| water lorelei 2006-09-13 ch 1, | LAUREN! I CAN'T BELIEVE IT'S YOU! *restarts heart* I liked this! Twas a bit... I dunno. The poetry itself? Lovely. The meaning...? I won't ask. Well, I am SO SO happy that you plan to finish Crimson Eyes and continue on with Fiction Press! For a minute there I thought you were leaving us... Vell, Happy Sailing, and don't rush the writing! Farewell, *silent darkness* |
| Autumn Dance 2006-09-13 ch 1, | Low, seriously this is probably one of your best pieces. Really beautiful- you know i'm a fan of parenthesis (sp) and it's just so subtle and elegant. Well done babe and welcome back "BOYS ARE BACK IN TOWN!" *does scary air guitar*Keep it up and update you watermelon...x |
| Ophelia's Crown 2006-09-13 ch 1, | I think you need to have more confidence in yourself! I myself am a huge fan of parentheses... and yours gracefully add a deeper layer to your poem. Beautifully written. Keep it up. |