Hey, 'Nisha.
A fit of madness overtook me and now I have an account on here.
'Tis Zephy.

Zanisha! [Hey-lo, it's Gray-Rain Skies from ffnet, :D] And you're phenomenal, you know that?

Seriously. Wow. I loved this so much I can't put it accurately into words. I just can't do it justice. But yes, this was yet another amazing piece of fiction by you, and I hope you continue it, because I'd love to learn more about your original character [Zeïri seems so cool, xD]

[I also read the excerpt in your profile, too. And I hope you post that story soon, because it sounds just as awesome as this one is]

You're awesome, Zanisha. Your work awes me every single time.

hah, i knew there was something i've been neglecting to do.

&yeah, this is pretty crazy. i really like the concept. crayons vs. grafitti; just that on its own, in and of itself is incredible and paired with your writing, i honestly don't know how anyone could not like it. goodness, i really hope you update this. i mean, it's good on its own, but zeiri seems like such an interesting character that at the very least, i hope you use her again. yep, very much so. :)

on a side note, i'm considering transferring snapshots from ffnet to here; what do you think?

ilu neesh! :D

♥ xsyntheticsmile

ps, tenth review. yay! xD;

First of all, the opening line rocked. No two ways about it, I was hooked from the very beginning. The prologue to the prologue was deep without seeming to be, and the way you seamlessly moved from Then to Now was magnificent. I always have trouble crossing time in my writing.

'Get with the times.
It’s art, just like your soul and mind;
not meant to be coloured between the lines' - This is one of the best things I have ever read. It should be written everywhere. I hope to see more of this, if you had that in mind. Fantastic writing.

Peace, Daze

It's so pretty! This is awesome. I love the crayons and the spraypaint and everything! Ha, take that, standardized education! ^^;;

Hey Zani! I was checking out your ff.net profile and noticed you mentioned having an account on fiction press. Awesomeness all the way! This story is another perfect example of why you completely rock my socks! Luv ya!

Although this piece of writing appears to be a prologue of a novel, I have to point out that it works really well as a vignette. I love how the contrast in the first sentence – crime and kindergarten – solidly establishes the theme of this entire piece. It then builds upon opposite parallel imagery, beginning with the phrase, “she remembers the wax crayons more vividly than yesterday’s cigarettes, in a swirl of regret and fascination; adventure.” This image is breath-taking, sticking to me whilst I read through the sentences and continued staying thereafter. Overall, this is a well-written and interesting portrayal of a modern rite of passage in our troubled twenty-first century.

Cheers, Autumn.

"This is a crime reminiscent of crayons on kindergarten walls"

I love that line. Actually, I loved all of it. I have a thing for detail and your story was chalk full of it. It's rather intriguing and I'd like to see where the story goes.

You know what? I'm sincere when I say that this is something to be proud of.

I'm always ragging on you for making your prose *too* poetic. This, however, flows *extremely* well and still manages to come off as a good story. Likening the cigarettes to the crayons: that metaphor worked so well that even I had to read it over.

All I hope is that you'll keep this up with the other chapters. You've hit a good spot, keep it coming!

-- 'Lei.

'Bout damn time I read something on fiction press xD

I really liked this. The continous mentions of the crayons and art and the canvas all made this ficcie flow really well. I liked the cigarettes bit too. Zeiri sounds very interesting.

The douchebag comment made me snrk.

I shall go ** your poetry collection now >3

[ SMW ♥ ]

Rather interesting so far. You've got my full attention. I really want to see where this is going - please continue.

Wowie... ...this is really different in a cool way, I love it! I like how you keep going about crayons and colouring and art.. ...that's super cool... ...and Zeiri sounds liek a really intresting character. The cigarette thing made me go O_O" but then like you don't see a lot of characters {At least for all Ivey knows} that have habits like that. I luff how you tossed it in insteada being all... ..."She had a cigarette yesterday" lawlies.

But.. ...ahh... ..what else?

I thinksh Zeiri with the funny I ish a cool name... ..Where'd joo get it? What does it mean?? I wanna knooww XDXDXD And I like the title too, ish a cool word. Wanna see if it means anything to le story though.

Plz don't let this die like ur fanfics. I luff it! XD

+IVEY+ aka Veyvey :D