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Halcyon Impulsion 2009-02-27 . chapter 1
I loved the third and fourth stanzas the best. I think you could actually lose the final 2 lines, or at least move them up into the middle of the fourth stanza and it might strengthen it overall--the ending of the fourth stanza is really powerful. You've got some gorgeous stuff in here :)
Tytherpol 2007-11-30 . chapter 1
oh this is lovely.
"the ferry, personified and named, perhaps
loved by captain " & "prostrate on the floor"
-- i love the meanings in this.
the whole piece.
awesome.
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