 Olusenka 2006-09-15 . chapter 1Haha, well what can I say? Amusing story. Good grammar, neat premise, the beginning was the best part of it. One of the better stories I have read on this site - concise and amusing. Critically speaking, I think the second half of this tale is not as good as the first, I'd rephrase it for more impact since you can kind of see what's coming. I would have loved to have seen the boss get served half a banana with the peel superglued for shape or something. A twist. Anyway without getting too carried away - good job, could have seen this in a magazine. |