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| epic tsubaki. 2006-11-07 ch 1,  | abuseVivid description. I love this line: "planting seeds of luscious instability in my parched paper eyes." Such lovely images this creates. I love it, truly. Keep writing~ ~c&l. |
| Osunale 2006-10-29 ch 1, | abuseBreath-catching. Beautiful, vivid words. Wonderful work. |
| the naked civil servant 2006-10-25 ch 1, | abuseIn these wind-sheathed shields, these sketch-inked self-names that's so beautiful. it's so eloquent, so evocative, the whole thing. "when you fell up to my level" is gorgeous too... |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-09-19 ch 1, | abuse"These talks are not the cosmic explosion I was promised" - I really love this line. This whole idea of talking and finding out the meaning of life or something equally as important, and then it doesn't happen... That's just something all too common, and the way you phrased this is so nice. "dripping with dark kool-aid" - I've never seen this image used before, and I like it. It's very unique, and the way you didn't capitalize kool-aid makes it seem like something really common. Very nice. You have a way of captivating me with every word you write. Brilliant work once again. Keep writing! :) |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-09-19 ch 1, | abuseYou flow from everyday language to eloquent higher language so effortlessly it's amazing. "He's my vagabond attraction", is a wonderfully telling description. The entire work is so well developed and presented. Great write. A favorite. |
| Anaare 2006-09-17 ch 1, | abuseWhat a wonderful creation! A soul carver... I just got such a vivid image from that. Absolutely wonderful! |
| Morte d'Amour 2006-09-15 ch 1, | abuseThis was beautifully written...I especially liked the last part. Excellent descriptions and everything. Thank you for sharing. :) |