i love the descriptions and sadness and confusion. great work.

flawless style. it moves almost alarmingly fast, breaking thoughts into lines which try to move the eye faster than the mind.

i dig

x_till tonight do us part

gorgeous imagery. x

(Talking to you through LJ reminded me I'd been meaning to review some of your new work! I also still have this insane plan of reading everything eventually, just to let ya know.)

"and when the boy asked me if i was okay i had to take a moment to think: wait, am i okay?" Perfect. You can tell this girl is falling- hasn't fallen yet, but is on her way, she's going to crash and burn. And to be able to capture that feeling- well, I've been trying for ages, it's not easy. Hats of to you.

The middle stanza is nice and twisted- pure confusion with just a drop of clarity. It works really well.

And the ending... yeah, I just love it.

You write the words I can't seem to say.

i don't have anything to give you but this: i know, i know...

i kept looking for you under your old username,
and stumbled across you on this one through someones favorites
list, and i am glad.

if this is from experience than i would say your a certified HEARTBREAKER! how do you do it?

The format of this poem really works with the flow of it, because the long stanza gets you into this reading habit where you're just reading and reading and not taking a breath anywhere. And then you want to remember his name. Nice. I also like how you integrated the title into the poem. That's nice, too. Keep writing! :)

I love this poem. The words are so honest and raw, great work!

write on,

-Em

Aah the last line! I love this. -is at a lack of better things to say.

wtf. did erik do something!?

i'm gonna have to bust a cap. xD

wonderful as always, rei!

oh this is gorgeous. 'but wait, what was his name?' this is so familiar, this poem. to my life, it's like de ja vu for me & i love that. wonderfully written, too.

short sweet write on !