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| Prideful Mutt 2006-10-07 ch 1,  | abuseI usually don't like anything to ryme because it always sounds forced. This ws great, it flowed really well. This may not mean anything but I congradulate you on being the only guy I can think of who can write and may actually have feelings Peace, Fairies and coffee Tink |
| criti-sized 2006-09-18 ch 1, | abuseThis was a truly nice poem, the words in it were nice, and the meaning came across very clear. It's true in alot of points that we all do have problems that we, as humans, try to ignore, and if they are constantly thrown onto the back burner of our lives end up somehow channeling out negative karma. Again, I really like this poem for the reality touch to it, and the small advice that you gave. I stay true to it either way, thanks to my psychoanalyzing friend, that's always around me. |
| Peter Harrison 2006-09-17 ch 1, | abuseThanks for the review Ulzhan. I would respond via e-mail but I don't think I have your e-mail, so... No Im not having any big problems, but certainly we all have shortcomings to overcome constantly. Didn't realize that I wrote it like an essay, lol, but looking back, I guess I did. I'm not too fond of essays, so maybe that's why this wasn't one of my own favourites. Thanks again for the reviews (and this goes to anyone else who reviews me regularily, especially criti-sized, who I think has reviewed almost every poem I wrote since she started reading) Peter |
| ulzhan 2006-09-17 ch 1, anon. | abuseHey!!How are you? i hope you're not having any BIG problems...because as you said we all have them..but as long as they are not shaping our future or the future of others they are ok...right? =)I really like this poem..especially the ending..=)..for some reason it seems that the poem is like a mini-essay..you make your point..explain it..go back to it..an so on..i think that structure makes this piece so understandable, yet meaningful, simply true and appealing...=)goodjob!!take care, ulzhan |
| Sakiya Ayami 2006-09-15 ch 1, | abusewow...very nice..it rhymes and it's deep, Keep it up~ |