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Need 'n' Know 2008-08-10 ch 7,	abuseAww, a music to go with love. > >"... And I’m going to tell that person I love them..." It should be "her" instead of "them." He knows who he's talking about, so it's just pretty awkward if he refers to her as "them." I think it's sweet, he went home to her. The last sentence is a very nice touch. Need 'n' Know
Need 'n' Know 2008-08-10 ch 6,	abuseThe fact is not because we're speaking different country English (O_O), it's because in every place, "you're" would mean "you are," and you're using it wrong! gasps Yeah, lol, don't take me too seriously. I'll explain. > > >“That’s your own fault, sweetie, it’s not my fault your clumsy..." The mum meant to say, "it's not my fault you are clumsy," right? So there you go. That "your" is wrong. Man, I need some sort of sign over my head, don't I? > > >“Oh, Daniel, sweetie. I had hoped you didn’t hear any of that,” She said trying to smile. The thing is, after that comma, "she" shouldn't be capitalized. It's the way it is, I'm sure that it's no different in other countries. You've got a lot of that going on, gotta say. And some really awkward sentences. Not sure if "apart" is supposed to be together. "You are a part of this family now." "Apart" would mean to not be close to each other, to be at a distance. Oh well, look it up and don't blame me if I'm wrong! =X In the US, it'd be just "college." "University" and "college" being interchangeable. Of course, the one I'm going to has "university" in it. Lmao. A random info I wanted to share. I liked it. A little fast-paced. I want to know why Daniel was ignoring her, but yeah, it's fine. It's like one of those mysteries you'd rather not find out. Need 'n' Know
Spring Angel 2008-08-04 ch 7,	abuseOMG THOSE WERE GOD! I loved the 6:42A.M. one. That was really happy/sad at the same time and I absolutely loved it. Any more One-Shots? ^^ ()() (^^) (__)
YoursMarilyn 2008-07-23 ch 7,	abusei really loved 6:42am. that was one favorite.
Jayjack 2008-07-20 ch 7,	abuseone word: AWE! hahah. :]
RoseLife 2008-07-20 ch 7,	abusereally adorable very touching ^.^ well done! !!
Faith Adeline 2008-07-19 ch 7,	abuseAw, very cute. good job. Faith
xemeraldeyesx 2008-07-19 ch 7,	abuseim really getting sick of saying aw but aw. goes off to download the song
outsidersgirl 2008-07-19 ch 7,	abusethis is good
E.the.word-nerd 2008-07-18 ch 6,	abuseo this one was especially great!!
E.the.word-nerd 2008-07-18 ch 2,	abuseRead, liked and LOVED!
cheergurl12 2008-05-22 ch 1,	abuseare u gonna post a new chapter of finding evan? cause the first chapter was rlly good and i wanna kno wht happens next!?!
Faith Adeline 2008-02-19 ch 6,	abusecute story, I really liked it :) Faith
Faith Adeline 2008-02-19 ch 3,	abuseaw, this was really cute. I enjoyed it. Great piece :) Faith
InLoveWithAFool 2008-02-15 ch 1,	abuseI loved your one-shot for "Vampire Love." It wasn't pouring out in detail; It was simple, but you really captured the meaning of it and that's why I liked it so much. Plus, it was cute. Great job! :]]

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