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KonekOniko 2006-12-05 ch 1,	abuseThe strong point in this piece is in the imagery, but I also like the formatting as well (I'm a freak for formatting, you see =)). Anyways, it's a pretty strong piece as a whole, as well; definately an enjoyable read
by His blood 2006-09-22 ch 1,	abusethis is beautiful. i'm sorry that i haven't gotten the chance to review it sooner, but i did read it and loved it. it's so powerful, just gorgeous. perfectly written. i love the imagery and the style, it's flawless. 'we breathe&bleed together inside transfusions' -- flawless first line. 'that fuse us together like fire and petrol' -- oh, just perfect. beautiful imagery here. 'we burn together & dance with love against our tongues and songs sticking to our lips,' -- again, just gorgeous imagery. 'breaking hearts indifferently as if we were the flames themselves' -- perfect line. so powerful, it hits so hard. 'we paint on repeat that we can "make it" against everything' -- interesting word choice here. if you did intend to use 'paint on repeat,' it's extremely original and breath-taking imagery. if you didn't, it's beautifully used all the same. '& wouldn't it be lovely if everytime we touch - my heart didn't burn' -- , i can relate to that. you wrote it beautifully. 'oh can't you see my eyes flashing at you' -- for some reason, the bolding of 'at' is especially powerful. 'won't you bleed inside transfusions (fuse together) with me' -- such a beautiful, powerful ending. i love this. it's beautiful, just like all your work.
alice is dying 2006-09-22 ch 1,	abuseWonderful piece. The flow was a bit off and akward, even though I can tell that you tried to end the line so it carried you to the next (ne??) sometimes you should just let thought play themselves out. But the entire idea in this piece (what, with the fusing and all) was mind blowingly gorgeous. Honestly, I love it. And you do wonders with the formatting-I can't compare. Lovely. ♥ Alice
classic violet 2006-09-20 ch 1,	abuseI love the first line and 'we / paint on repeat that we can "make it " / against everything & wouldn't it be lovely' is just brilliant and lovely. i love how this ends.

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