Reviews for Fire of Darkness - FictionPress.com

Julian 2006-10-05 ch 1, anon.	abuseGood plot... can't wait to read more, although the end of this chapter could use a little work. You kind of rushed through it. I liked the beginning of this chapter, a "good lead", although a tad bit rushed. I still think it's good.
omgshMikey 2006-09-29 ch 1,	abusePretty impressive. I think you could probably work on your spacing. There's some words that are together..likethis. (I'm a grammar freak. Sorry.)I hope you update soon!
Dai Xin Yi 2006-09-16 ch 1,	abuseWell, it's not terrible, but it could use a whole lot of work. I think that in a few places you missed a few words, like when the son says "But, why are we going to Throne Room?" there should be a 'the' before 'throne'. You also need more detail. I lost interest about half way through the story. I mean, I'm not trying to be rude or anything, but I'm not going to lie to you either. I think that if you fix it up a bit it would be an easier and more interesting read. Please don't take this as a flame, I just didn't know any other way to say it. Just work on it a bit. ~La Primavera
Philosophy101 2006-09-16 ch 1,	abuseok, but those two chapters each needed to be longer