should i be concerned? have i missed something?

short and bitterlysweet, i like it. personally i would love to see more on this, but i think this particular piece could not have more and keep the same feeling. i love it :)

i liked this. the image of 'burn-drying' was especially powerful, and the entire poem hits hard. it conveys a lot of meaning in so few words, which is extremely difficult to accomplish. 'the night we pledged eternity' -- flawless line, and the imagery before it is perfect. 'ever since then i've almost hated you' -- powerful ending. this isn't quite as powerful or effective as it could be, but given the length, it's a good poem. overall, well done.

Has a strange, story-telling quality to it; I like it.