Reviews for Dreams of Blood and Water

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Estelin 2007-03-12 ch 3,	abusethis is great can't wait for more. keep up the good work.
R. A. Faith 2006-11-25 ch 3,	abuseI'm confused, of course. But the plot seems good. I suppose you have your reasons for skipping over a few scenes, but whatever. Where is Cari going?
CK Shorty 2006-10-19 ch 3,	abuseAnother cliffhanger! Ah! Update soon because it's getting even better and I can't wait to see where this story is going.
CK Shorty 2006-10-19 ch 2,	abuseYou like cliffhangers, don't you? Haha, another good chapter, but sad that the dad died :o(
CK Shorty 2006-10-19 ch 1,	abuseLovely first chapter and the description was nicely done.
Right or Ryn 2006-09-22 ch 3,	abuseOkay, so you are not stopping right there. I order you to keep going. You have to... please? The plot was starting to pick up and I'm getting interested, to say the least.
Right or Ryn 2006-09-22 ch 2,	abuseWhile I did suspect Michael leaving I did not expect the time-travelish twist on the story. -btw Hannah seems cute.
Right or Ryn 2006-09-22 ch 1,	abuseI knew things were too good to be true. (I haven't read the other chapters yet and I'm going to guess what happens). Does Michael die? Will she have to raise the child as a single mother? It would be interesting if Michael and Cari both lived but Michael got paralyzed or something. The most obvious thing that could happen would be that she loses the baby. Well, I'm going to go see what happens! Be back in a sec.
Delandred 2006-09-20 ch 3,	abuseGreat job again, i could find nothing wrong with it, well done. Looking forward to seeing where this leads
CorruptGuardian 2006-09-18 ch 3,	abusePoor elf. He seems so nice and she kinda snapped at him... Although, I guess crashing your car and loosing your daughter doesn't leave you in the best mood...
L Mirabeau 2006-09-17 ch 3,	abuseok. good points: - the chapter is nice and concise - this is an interesting development. i like where the story's going. - the character reaction is ok. If i'd written this chapter, I would have botched it completely, but you've done well. -"There was… nothing. Not a little pink sock… not a teddy… not a sound…" I like the way you've taken that whole cliche thriller/other writers try to use to make their work sound dramatic/scary, and skewed it. ('not a little pink sock') typos "Stood around three metres in front of her was a young man with very light blonde hair and pale skin. His eyes were a piercing blue… this appearance alone would be perfectly acceptable" I think 'would have been' sounds better, and also 'standing' not stood. bad points - gives you a good slap on the wrist too many ellipses... it gets annoying after a while... don't use them excessively... understand? - Because she faints and everything, maybe you should build up to it - ie. mention it as you go along, her struggling against the pain the whole time -, because initially it doesn't seem like it's that bad. (although, I suppose if cari is in shock, she might not notice it either.) Anyway, please keep at it, i'm enjoying it.
dessertfirst 2006-09-17 ch 3,	abuselaughs Oh my gracious--this is kind of like my story! Girl is transported to fantasy land, meets elves, faints. Except your elves seem nice. Anyway, I adore it. While I was reading the first two chapters, I actually forgot it was going to be a fantasy story. Please write more, and make your chapters a little longer, okay?
lightpaladin 2006-09-17 ch 3,	abuseThis is a good story. It has a nice flow to it and also has great description. And I like cliffhangers, too; they add suspense to the story. Keep up the good work. Update Soon! May The Light Guide Your Path Of Writing!~Lightpaladin;)
CorruptGuardian 2006-09-17 ch 2,	abusePoor Cari. She has bad luck with cars, doesn't she? Anyway, interesting, very interesting... I shall have to keep an eye on this story...
CorruptGuardian 2006-09-17 ch 1,	abuseNice writing. I like the detail, that there's not too much or too little. It's very well written.

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